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Poetry
As solid as the trees
By Chinaski
11 February 2008
One wakes up at noon
to the wind howling
bitterly
Telling you to stay inside

But you walk up to the window
To stare at the greyness and
the glumness of it all
And you notice that
despite the roaring
the trees look completely still

Naked branches but still defiant
and you wish that you
could be that way

As solid as the trees
Never thwarted
Ever firm in the wind

Reviews

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3331 comments posted) 11th February 2008
I'm guessing you weren't in England in the autumn of '87. You might have chosen another metaphor for constancy if you had been
equally
Written by fellpony (1603 comments posted) 11th February 2008
you weren't in the north of England, or Scotland, in January 2005. Mountains, perhaps, would have been a less fragile image than trees.

Written by Abigail (24 comments posted) 11th February 2008
I liked this poem. 
The image is very strong, I can see someone staring out the window at the wind howling around outside. 
Very nice. 
 
Abigail

Written by Phil (6683 comments posted) 11th February 2008
Like the idea, but like the first two above, not sure the metaphor works so well. Perhaps the trees are a lot less whippy where you are. 
 
Small point - may be me - may not be. First line, use of 'one.' Doesn't quite sound right, especially as you do not maintain that usage. Perhaps you (one) could start with the imperative: Wake up at noon... 
 
Phil

Written by eudimonia (16 comments posted) 11th February 2008
I think "one" works, lends an air of detachment, maybe despair, to a melancholy moment. Well done.

Written by Fledermaus (3248 comments posted) 12th February 2008
Have you heard the story about the helms of grass that thought the same? Unfortunately I don't know the source anymore, but anyways, those helms of grass complained that they always had to bow for the wind, while a tree could stand tall and never had to bow... Until the tree they talked about was blown over... 
 
still a nice poem though ;)

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