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By maipenrai
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14 February 2008 |
Come The Revolution.  The Lord Giveth !!!
He gave yer bloody nowt mate
did yer Lord
bugger all to Billy Muggins
and that's for sure.
The Lord Giveth, aye
lying priest's and brainwashed kids,
Peters Pence spent in Rome
that's what yer Lord Giveth..
Come the revolution brother
the Red Flags will fly high
then we will see
what yer bloody Lord Giveth,
stuff and nonsense brother,
stuff and nonsense. |
Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3362 comments posted) 14th February 2008 | Sometimes you have to search a poem for subtext and meaning and sometimes it kicks you in the shins and screams it's meaning in your ear. No doubt what category this fits in.
I tend to agree with you but aren't we just swapping one belief system for another? Their shared aim is to control the poor peasants | Hi
Written by maipenrai (783 comments posted) 14th February 2008 | BBS and thank you for your review, you could well be dead on re belief systems, I have at times thought it strange the way we all seem to need a belief to follow, but if you go all the way back it as always been that way, part of human nature I suppose.
as for subtext/meaning , yes I agree, most of what I write is a simple , in your face kind of writing,
"if yer's got owt to say lad, then bloody well say it" type of stuff. 
Bernie |
Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3362 comments posted) 14th February 2008 | | Oh,it wasn't a criticism, just a light-hearted observation [I can't operate those smilie faces] I live dangerously close to Yorkshire so am well aquainted with that attitude to life. I'm quite happy with it I just wish they came with a volume control sometimes. | hi
Written by maipenrai (783 comments posted) 14th February 2008 |
BBS, i did not take your comments as a bad crit, just explaining my "style" of writing
Bernie
ps, as for the smilie faces etc, just click on it. |
Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 14th February 2008 | .....but the lord generally taketh away.
Being a peasant myself, they can all bugger off.
Direct - I liked it for that.
Phil |
Written by Matthiasrising (32 comments posted) 14th February 2008 | Reminds of the vocodor section of Sheep by Pink Floyd.
"The Lord is my shepherd, I shall not want
He makes me down to lie
Through pastures green he leadeth me the silent waters by
With bright knives he releaseth my soul
He maketh me to hang on hooks in high places
He converteth me to lamb cutlets
For lo,m he hath great power and great hunger
When cometh the day we lowly ones
Through quiet reflection and great dedication
Master the art of karate
Lo, we shall rise up
And then we'll make the bugger's eyes water."
Liked your use of dialect throughout. | Thanks
Written by maipenrai (783 comments posted) 15th February 2008 | Phil and Matthiasrising for your comments.
Bernie |
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