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The Red Devils - Chapter 2
By jean.day
14 February 2008

I couldn’t wait to get to school on Monday. I had my plan for my essay all worked out, and knew that I could do a good job on it.

But I had to wait until the last class of the day, English Grammar and Composition, taught by Miss Frances Marble. She also taught French and German.  I know that Miss Marble is 29, and she lives in a boarding house with one of our other teachers, Miss Mary Miner who is 26. Miss Miner teaches the practical subjects for girls - sewing, cooking, embroidery, practical housekeeping. The only other teacher, Mr. Charles Peck, is older, maybe 50 even, and he is the principal. He teaches science, math, geography and history.

We have 74 students in the high school which has been going in three rooms on the upper floors of the Prospect Street School since 1876 when public education became compulsory in Connecticut. There are plans for a new high school building on Congress Street, but that won’t be ready while we're still in school. Both Cora and I want to go to the Bridgeport City Normal School for teacher education next fall.

Because there are so few teachers, many times during the day, we have study periods when we work on our, without being taught. But the last period of the day is English, my very favorite.

Everything started out well. We, the seven top class students with potential to go on to further education, were all keen to work hard, and prove to the others how much we could do on our essay project. Miss Marble suggested that the best student’s work might have a chance of being published in the special section of our newspaper, the Bridgeport Daily Standard.

“Now, students, settle down, and let’s talk about whom you have chosen to do your essays on. Let’s start with you Nelson.” Nelson comes from the poshest area of Bridgeport, and plans to be a doctor like his father.
 

“I’ve chosen Abraham Lincoln, Miss.”

“Well, that’s just fine, but I hope you will make it more than just what we all already know about President Lincoln. I’m sure you can dig up some facts that will astound us all. And how about you Thomas?”

Thomas Congden is the oldest of our group, as he is 20, but he was not able to attend school for many years due to ill health.

“I was going to do Lincoln, too, Miss.”

“Well, I don’t think that is a very good idea. Surely you can think of someone else. I will come back to you again at the end and see if you have had any more ideas. Now Cora Sue, who have you chosen?”

“I plan to do Phideus Barnum, Miss.”

“Well, he certainly is famous, and local as well. I look forward to what you stories you will have to tell us about his life. Now what about you Fredrick?”

“My Ma said that she thought 10,000 words was way too much to ask of us, Miss. She said that was half a book and would take an age to write.”

“Did you tell your mother, Fredrick, that you have until May to do this work? And let’s see, that is 18 weeks. So let’s see how well you learned your arithmetic. How many words does that make per week?”

Fredrick thought for awhile and said, “About 525, Miss.”

“And how many words can you write on a piece of paper, do you know?”

“No, Miss.”

“Well, I will tell you. It’s about 300 unless you write very big, so that makes it less than two pages a week, or less than half a page a day. Do you think that is too much for someone who is aspiring to higher education?”

“Well, no, Miss. I’ll tell my Ma that you said it was half a page a day. She will be okay with that.”

“Now, are you going to enlighten us as to what your topic for this half page a day will be, Fredrick?”

“Mark Twain, Miss. Did you know that he lives in Hartford, Miss? I think I would like to interview him personally.”

“That is an excellent choice, Fredrick, and we will talk more about your research methods in a few moments.
Now, Josephine, whom have you chosen to write about?”

“I think I will do Sacajawea, Miss. I got the idea from Mattie last Friday when she mentioned her, and she might be an Indian, Miss, but she was famous, and I wish I could have met her.”

“Well, I think it would be more sensible, Josephine, if you were to write about Lewis and Clark’s expedition. I cannot believe you will find enough material on Sacajawea to write 10,000 words, but if you write about them, then it would be okay to mention a bit about her too.”

“Yes, Miss. I will do my best to make most of my words be about her, but I will mention them too, Miss.”

“Now what about your subject, Albertina?”

“I think I would like to write about Harriet Beecher Stowe, Miss. She is the one who wrote Uncle Tom’s Cabin, you know.”


“Yes, I did know that Albertina, and she wrote many other books as well. I hope you will inform us about all of her work in your essay. And that leaves you Mattie. I hope you have chosen wisely.”

“Yes, Miss. I am going to write about my Pa, Mark Kellogg.”

“I don’t really think that would be appropriate, Mattie. This is a project to teach you methods of research. You already know all there is to know about your Pa, or you could find it out very easily. I think you should take someone else.”

“I’ll take her Pa, Miss,” said Thomas. “You said I couldn’t do Lincoln, and as long as she can’t do her Pa, I can do it, and I can use her as my reference.” Everyone laughed but for Cora Sue and me.

“Don’t let him, Miss. I don’t want him writing about my Pa. He'd make a mess of it.”

“I don’t think it is up to you Mattie to determine who writes about whom, but I agree with you that it would not be a good choice. Mattie and Cora Sue, I don’t mean to be insensitive, but your father is not really famous in the true sense of the word. I want you to write about someone whose name will be known to nearly everyone, say 100 years from now all over the world, but for example in England. Do you really think that people in London in 1980 will know who Mark Kellogg was? I don’t. But you do know the name that they will recognise, and that is General George Custer. So Mattie, I think you should write about General Custer, and include bits about your father in it. Would that suit you?”

“I don’t like the sound of General Custer much. I know my Pa liked him, but he seemed a pretty stupid man to me,” I said.

“Well, stupid or not, he did a lot of things in his life that he will be remembered for - as well as getting massacred at the Little Big Horn. Make sure you bring in some of those other things too. But now Thomas, we still have to find someone for you. Someone that you have thought of yourself, I would prefer.”

“I could do Shakespeare, I suppose,” Thomas said, not very happily.

“An excellent idea,” said Miss Marble.

“Or I could do Charles Dickens. I think maybe that would be easier as he didn’t talk quite so funny.”

“Well, let’s settle on that then, before you think of someone else. You shall do Charles Dickens. Now we have a president, an explorer, a circus leader, two authors, an authoress, and an Army General. I think that is quite a nice cross section of society for us to work with.

"But now let us concentrate on how you are going to go about doing this project. By next Monday, I would like you to do a rough outline, and also your introduction. Now, Kellogg girls, you come from a journalistic background. Tell me what should be in a good introduction.”

“Who, What, When, Where and Why, Miss,” Cora Sue piped up before I could get a chance to say a word.

“And don’t forget How,” I added importantly.

“Well done girls. They are very easy to remember, and you all already know WHO you are writing about. You need to find out WHEN they lived, if they have already died, and when they were born, if they are still alive. You need to find out WHERE they lived, both when they were born, and when they became famous. You need to think about WHAT they did that made them famous, and what specifically about what they did that makes you wish that you could meet them. And of course, not forgetting the WHY and HOW. If they did something famous it probably means that they had to overcome obstacles in their lives to achieve it. And now my next question to you is, how are you going to go about finding out about these people?”

“Books, Miss, at the Library.”

“Yes, good, Thomas, and we are very lucky to have such a good library in Bridgeport. And you mentioned another way earlier, Fredrick, and that was by interview. But some of these people will not live close enough for you to interview them, and many of them are no longer living. How else could we find out about them?”

“By writing to people who knew them - or perhaps their wives or children,” I said.

And by newspaper reports too, Miss,” Cora Sue added.

“There might write letters to us, if they live too far away,” added Albertine. “I know that Mrs Stowe lives in Connecticut, but I couldn’t easily get away to interview her, but I could write to her and ask her all sorts of things.”

“Yes, indeed, Albertine. We have Mr. Lincoln and General Custer, both dead, but not all that long ago, so there will be relatives of theirs still around to write to. Lewis and Clark will be a bit more difficult.”

“My grandmother has a copy of their journal, Miss. She has lots of books at her house and I expect she will let any of us go and look through them, if I ask her.”

“That is a wonderful help Fredrick. Thank you. Now let’s see who else there is. Mr. Dickens didn’t die all that long ago, so some of his relatives might be willing to write to you and his publishers will be easy to contact.

"Mr. Clemens (Mark Twain’s real name you know) and Mrs. Stowe should be quite easy to come by information from. But the easiest of all will be Mr. Barnum, who lives in our very own town. And I understand that he has quite a book collection of his own, so you will have to find out if he will be willing for us to make use of it, Cora Sue.

"Well, that is about it for today, but you will need to be getting busy to get your outline and introduction, of perhaps 500 words, ready for me by next Monday. And that is about all we have time for this afternoon. Class dismissed.”

I felt very let down as we walked home. I really wanted to write my essay all about Pa, not just have him as a paragraph, but I could see Miss Marble’s point of view.

“Why didn’t you say you would write about Mr. Bennett, Mattie? I thought he was the one you would choose if you couldn’t do Pa.”

“Well, I certainly intend to use him to get information for me, and maybe even we can get a trip to New York out of this - and find out information from his newspaper, the New York Herald.”

“Do you think he would let us come with you?” asked Josephine.

“We haven’t even asked if we can go yet, but if there is a chance, we will see if we can get permission for you to go too. I would love to see New York.”

So our school day ended, and we said good bye to our friends and went up the steps and into the porch of our house, full of plans about how we were going to get going on our projects.

Reviews

Written by bluecity (432 comments posted) 14th February 2008
Well, what a long chapter, Jean. You used to write such short episodes! I think i see where this is going now. You are going to do more research, famous Americans, this time.  
 
I liked the school-teacher.Miss Marble. Her smugness comes across as quite appropriate for her era, although I did think that the discussion as to who did what went on rather. I wondered if you were using it to introduce other characters, but, if so, there were rather a lot being brought in at once. 
 
I'm left wondering why Mattie didn't make more fuss about doing Mr Bennett. Are you making a statement about Mattie's character? Is she a bit of a push-over, I wonder. All good stuff to get me reading the next chapter. 
 
Rosemary
Thanks Rosemary
Written by jean.day (2366 comments posted) 15th February 2008
Yes, the long chapter was introducing the other students so I can then use them to forward the plot. Because the scene was the classroom, I needed to mention all the other students to make it believeable. I limitted the students to 7 because that seemed the minimum number that would be put in a special accellerated class from that size group - and I also didn't want to have to research too many topics. But I won't be writing 10,000 word essays for each of them. But with each person there will be a certain amount of interesting information on their topics brought it to justify them being in the story.  
 
No, Mattie is not going to be a pushover. She is going to write the story about her father - and she is going to do it in her own way, but she needed to agree to do Custer in order to get past the teacher's objections. What she wants to do - is to tell the Custer story from the Indians point of view. And Mr. Bennett is a family friend - he pays each of the girls $50 a year, as a sort of compensation for the fact that their father was working for him when he was killed. He will definately be in the story, and his interesting life will be brought in without him having to be the subject of an essay.  
 
I aim at 4 pages a chapter - which is no more than 2000 words, and with lots of conversation, usually a lot less.  
 
 
 

Written by Fledermaus (3487 comments posted) 15th February 2008
You know how to choose your subjects, like with mr. Gibbon, I had to look up mr. Kellogg (thought it was about cereal). 
So what about the person having to be local? William Shakespeare wasn't exactly born in the USA... 
 
It's funny that while many Europeans laugh about Americans when they don't seem to know the details about European history (as if Europeans themselves do :roll ), most Europeans have no idea about America's past. 

Written by Phil (6959 comments posted) 15th February 2008
I didn't think this was particularly long, Jean. I think we come to judge things by GW standards at times - in a novel, this would be a pretty short chapter. 
 
I do envy the way you can launch into your extended pieces with a (seemingly) well thought out plan and work your way towards the closing chapter. I've got the ghost of an idea for a novel length (perhaps) story but I'm struggling to get enough flesh on it to see over the horizon to the end. 
 
Funny, the points about the opening paragraph - I still teach now - more or less. 
 
Enjoyed. 
 
Phil.
Thanks Fledermaus and Phil
Written by jean.day (2366 comments posted) 17th February 2008
I chose the subject, Fledermaus, by looking under the names of famous people from Bismarck - which is where I come from.  
 
I don't think I ever stipulated that the subject had to be an American. If so, I will go back and change that. Not that there will be much about Dickens in the story anyway. But other English people will come into the story as Mark Twain travelled a lot, and so did Mr. Barnum - and Mark Twain corresponded with Charles Walker - whose real diary we own -and who I have written a book about. And Charles Dickens lived in the same village as some of Philip's ancestors. So I have to get that in there somewhere too.  
 
Actually, the research dictates what I write. I was intending that Mr. Bennett be a big part of the story, and the other day I found out that he had left America by 1880 - due to some very interesting circumstances, which will be revealed, but my story changes as it goes along. But I do sort of always have 5 or 6 chapters in mind at a time.

Written by Lizzy (828 comments posted) 20th February 2008
This is developing nicely Jean with some very interesting possibilities. 
Lizzy
Thanks Lizzy
Written by jean.day (2366 comments posted) 20th February 2008
I'm afraid it has rather taken over my life at the moment. I spent all my time planning what to include and it is so hard to limit the information to only a snatch about some of the historical figues.

Written by rachel1983 (12 comments posted) 22nd March 2008
i am still hooked but have to say jean i am a little disapointed that you have let some of your story out in your reply to bluecity before i have read it! :(
Thanks Rachel
Written by jean.day (2366 comments posted) 23rd March 2008
Sorry if I spoiled it for you. Maybe you should read just the story and not the comments, because I do tend to go on about it in response to comments and questions.

Written by beatricelouise (215 comments posted) 29th March 2008
I'm getting more and more interested in this story. I also love to read the comments. Good for you, jean.day. I also thought this was to be about famous Americans, but I could have misread that part. Anyway, on to the next chapter as time permits. :grin

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