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By wierdlikthat
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14 February 2008 |
My old friend Julie changed so much when we became middle school students. This is a letter that I WILL NOT send to her, Im kind of afraid to. But this isnt just to Julie its to all the old friends out there!
Dear Old friends,
Old friends are the ones you laugh and cry with,
The ones who wipe your tears.
Old friends are the ones youve known forever,
And loved throughout the years.
Old friends are the ones you played those silly games with,
And laughed about them later.
Old friends are the ones things come naturally to,
the ones who talk without thinking.
Old friends are the ones you cant get enough,
the ones you love to see.
Old friends are the ones who if you dont change,
will stay friends forever.
But the change takes over,
The friendship will fade.
But a thin strand of the friendship,
is left connecting the pair.
For the old friends are part of each other.
Old friends are the one, who must make knew friends,
and the ones who myst read this letter.
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Written by fellpony (1569 comments posted) 14th February 2008 | I thought you were going to rhyme with style,
or at least say something new,
but you gave up after tears and years
and the rhythm turned bumpy too. |
Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3288 comments posted) 14th February 2008 | | I quite liked the repetition to emphasise the theme but you seem to give up on the rhyme after the first effort which, as FP said was a bit cliched. In fact after that it all fell in tired cliche. Nothing wrong in revisiting an old theme but you must find a new way of expressing it. This is too simplistic and poorly expressed. And the last line robs it of any meaning or relelvance to anybody else reading it Why do that if you want others to read it? |
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