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Poetry
The Attic
By francoise
18 February 2008

Sorry for the rather literal title, but I am absolutely hopeless at coming up with decent titles.
Found an old dress of mine recently, within the deep recesses of my wardrobe. Not quite an attic, but it triggered off ideas for a poem. This was the result.



In here there has never been light.

As I open the trapdoor

I am lifting a darkened weight.


Pressed flowers on my dress

hung up from a beam,

to find and recall,

my fingers run down it like hair.


Pale lace at the hem shifts

as its colour seeps back,

into a girl who spun around.

She is gently unravelled. 


What was once my light,

is now a hardened centre,

but as I take it down,

flecks of dust rise and fall


and like tiny puppets,

they dance in the light.

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Written by MariusBinx (17 comments posted) 18th February 2008
Nice. 
It seems to give flashes of memory or fantasy, about a past time. You seemed to put no special effort into drawing out that effect, but that flash of it seemed so perfect.

Written by francoise (129 comments posted) 18th February 2008
Thanks for commenting 
 
Fran :)

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