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basildon boy
By JWallendas
20 February 2008
the basildon boy
sang in a chore
he knows but one
growing like a fish

when will he know
that day be sent
for when it comes
hell will follow

but waiyt
wot is that noise
a rumble in the stoiks
shall he run or hide

the basildon boy is here

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Written by MariusBinx (17 comments posted) 19th February 2008
Honestly, I couldn't follow the idea, really understand what you were trying to say. That might just be me though. A simple spellcheck would help a lot here though. 
 
"a rumble in the stoiks"  
If you mean "a rumble in the stoics" than that's at least one great line, full of possible ideas and themes to run off of...

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