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Poetry
Rime
By Sir_Nigel
20 February 2008
I wanted to write a rhyme
about freezing fog and Rime.
Frost and snow may come and go - we see them all the time
But Rime’s a long lost brother - like the third, uncared for Attenborough.
It’s emerged from obscurity to bring crystaline purity
to world full of greyness and grime.  

When you’re bundled in your coats like a poor man’s Captain Oates.
And it’s 8 below and it’s time to go.
Just stop and spare some time
for the humble transient Rime.   

 


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Rime
Written by patterjack (1433 comments posted) 20th February 2008
I feel quite sure  
 
You'd write well about Hoar .  
 
patterjack

Written by NathanRoberts (277 comments posted) 20th February 2008
Some great lines...e.g. 
 
'But Rime’s a long lost brother - like the third, uncared for Attenborough.' 
 
and 
 
'When you’re bundled in your coats like a poor man’s Captain Oates.'  
 
Until now I'd only encountered Rime as 'The Rime Of The Ancient Mariner' but I am now awoken to the glorious knowledge that Rime is also: 
a white or milky and opaque granular deposit of ice formed by the rapid freezing of supercooled water drops  
 
So I must thank thee for that. 
 
 

Written by Veronica_Milvus (749 comments posted) 21st February 2008
Agree with Nathan - those two lines are gems!

Written by Sir_Nigel (40 comments posted) 21st February 2008
Thankyou. 
Glad you enjoyed my rime (rhyme - geddit?) 
 

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