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The Meat Market.
By maipenrai
20 February 2008
first posted june 05, some minor edits done, thought it might make a change from what is being posted on gw at the moment.

Please be aware that the
meat market will be open tonight,
down by the canal, near Rogers place,
come along , have some fun.

fresh meat for all,
if you have got the cash
continental if you so desire
from Moldovia and the Ukraine,
if your taste is more exotic
try our newly imported
African and Thai.

for those of you who
prefer home grown
we have some tender
locally bred chickens for you,
cheap as well, half the price
of the imported meat.

so come along, have your fill
quench your desire at the
meat market tonight,
fresh young meat from around the world,
fresh young chickens
just ready to be plucked
at the meat market tonight.

Reviews
haha
Written by sarahh (18 comments posted) 21st February 2008
LOL I liked it. Is the meat market symbolic for anything? If its not that's cool too. It had a nice rythem to it, except for some parts like when you used 'tonight' in the fifth line up. But over all I like it.

Written by Fledermaus (3487 comments posted) 21st February 2008
Only at night? There's a meat marked in Amsterdam 24/7. Recently the mayor realized that perhaps not all of the salespeople were meeting the quality standards and that not all of the chickens may have volunteered to be consumed, so there's a huge cleaning operation on the way. 
Thank You
Written by maipenrai (784 comments posted) 22nd February 2008
Sarahh and Fledermaus for your comments. 
Bernie
Meat market
Written by anaisanais (62 comments posted) 11th March 2008
Sounds like you have got it sorted over there with local produce being cheaper - unlike Britain!  
 
Your poem runs smooth, gives good example for your picture painted. Nice variety. Still trying to decide if you could have done anything with regards to metaphor or similie to add a deeper 'show' aspect to the reader for impact -mmmm. am still out on it sorry can offer no more....well done!
Hi Anaisanais
Written by maipenrai (784 comments posted) 11th March 2008
Thanks for your comments, I am a Manc living in Manchester but this is not about food, it is about the sex trade, it is about the slavery of hundreds of young male's and females in the UK, the term chicken refers to young boys traded between paeds. 
Bernie :(

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