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Poetry
Clocks
By wierdlikthat
20 February 2008
Spinning, Spinning,
round and round.
When quiet,
you will hear my sound.

When Im watched,
I move much slower.
I know when suns high,
when it is lower,

Im looked at almost every day,
every hour they glance my way.
wondring if the day'll go by.
when they are having fun, the time will surely fly.

I faster than,
the speed of sound.
time thats lost,
had best be found.

I stand there stiftly concentrating.
sitting proud and tall.
Inside im kind of wishing ,
that I werent a clock, on this wall.




srry,the poems up there ^
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Written by NathanRoberts (277 comments posted) 21st February 2008
I'm not sure that the main theme (a conscious clock) is totally convincing. Why doesn't the clock want to be a clock, especially since he/she/it is 'proud'? 
 
'Time that's lost had best be found'...Why? 
 
Couple of nice ideas though...'when I'm watched I move much slower', 'When quiet you will hear my sound'. 
 
A few typo errors: 'I'm watched';'wondering';'I'm faster than';'time that's lost';'I stand there stiffly''I weren't'.

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