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The (kind of) sad story of a girl and a spider
By Hellcat
21 February 2008

I told this story to a few friends today and they said I was creepy.

It's not creepy, it's sad.

Enjoy.


My home is a few hundred years old being a converted water-mill. So naturally, it's going to have a few nooks and crannys where the woodlice, moths and spiders can get in. This can be bothersome, especially in the Autumn months.
Also, I feel I should mention that I have a fear of spiders - I mean, I don't scream and bail but I will back off and cautiously watch it from a distance while someone else deals with it.

Which makes my story even sadder. *sigh*

One day, there was a girl (me) who was NOT fond of eight-legged things, they made her feel nervous. She avoided these things when possible and tried not to associate with such characters.

Another day, she found a friend of Charlotte's had taken up lodge in quite a low corner of the living-room. The thought of killing said intruder crossed her mind but never came into fruition because she was kind of a hippy and empathised with the under-dog.

Many, many days passed and a sort of unspoken,mutual understanding developed between the two - she would leave it to live out it's life in her lil corner if it didn't venture beyond that side of the room. It was allowed to wander over to the window to find food but that was all.

This Spider (it had no name but was determined to be a 'he') had built quite a castle for himself - a thick blanket of webbing that looked like nothing more but a tiny, miniature shelf up there in the corner where it would lazily spend the winter days just chilling out, as spiders sometimes do.

Now, the girl wasn't a complete tink, - she would hoover around the corners of this webby shelf to control its size, just to remind the beastie who was boss. And also, because sometimes she thought it was going to start a coupe, take over the place and invite its buddies.

A strange relationship developed as they observed each other with a mix of indifference and respect. Spider grew huge and still the girl was not that frightened.
And she did real well considering that the low corner was just above the screen she uses for playing the Xbox on, - he kind of kept her company and she was kind of proud of Spider for surviving so long (over a year) and for growing so big.

Now comes the sad part - kids should go to bed and those of a weak disposision should go make me a cup of tea.


During a weekday (this one, it was today *sob*) when the girl was off slaving herself for a cruel dictator (k, my boss is actually a really cool, old man), when she was earning some bread to buy food with, her one and only love decided to do a really good job of cleaning her house.

And, and....hoovered. And...did a really good job.

Spider is gone.
His wee shelf is no more.
I will never again play Xbox with my scary, actually-not-that-bad lil buddy.

Reviews
Poor Spider
Written by Abigail (29 comments posted) 21st February 2008
Poor Spider! It was sad. I really liked this story.

Written by coosh (923 comments posted) 22nd February 2008
Funny how stuff gets instilled in you from an early age - it was virtually a crime to kill a spider in my grandmother's house "because of Robert the Bruce"!! Course, neither she nor Rabbie ever had the experience of reading the paper on a toilet seat in Australia with a redback two inches from their bum... 
 
This was a pleasant, gentle tale (even if I did have to look up "Xbox") and I enjoyed the image of spiders "chilling out" waiting for the next wasp, in a cartoon sort of way. The end was a bit of an anti-climax, would have been nice to see more of a twist. Or keep the ending and exaggerate the relationship between narrator and spider more to achieve greater impact. These things are only "creepy" in context - had I been standing at the bar with Sylvester Stallone telling me this story, I would certainly have been "well freaked out"...
Awwwww
Written by book_worm (13 comments posted) 22nd February 2008
I liked your easy style of writing what turned into a sweet little piece, despite being burdened with severe arachnaphobia! 
 
However, the ending was waaaaay too far-fetched.  
I mean, the bloke hoovered????? Now come on!!! 
 
Seriously, keep writing but keep a check on the punctuation to help it roll along :)

Written by Fledermaus (3487 comments posted) 6th August 2008
Awww... Poor spider. I'm now imagining a scene with you coming home being angry with your boyfriend and him being totally confused because he thought you would be happy... :-P Very nice story.

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