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Poetry
Before
By NathanRoberts
23 February 2008
Another set of lyrics.  I wrote this one about five years ago, (I think), still pleased with some of the lines...enough to warrant posting it I guess.  Unfortunately as I'm a lazy bugger I haven't got round to recording it yet. 

You pick up the cup
and drink to starlit skies at forty five,
but you look well past
your sell-by.

You built a fan-base up
by neglecting your children and your wife
and now it's time to
review your life.

(Chorus)
Before,
you throw away your life on me,
open up your eyes and see.
-
By piling the pounds on,
you're cushioning the impact of surprise
and yet the doubt still creeps inside.

Now your number's up
you might as well just face it and comply.
It's time to
review
your life

Before,
you throw away your last salvation
open up your eyes and save him

Before,
you throw away your life on me,
open up your eyes and see

(Bridge)
And when you're lost
don't ignore
what you found
on the ground
as you lay there before.

(repeat chorus x2)

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Written by Fledermaus (3246 comments posted) 25th February 2008
A song with a message and a good rhythm. Don't know the music of course, but it flows well.

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