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Poetry
happiness
By wt
23 February 2008

Stay not with me longer than it takes to find
The everglade reeds wind in the eye
Of a hurricane nearing swirling high
Stroke of a pen change the tide
On surging oceans echoing wild
Thunderous lightning a salute in bolts
Rising moon faint hint of shadow
Over clouds bright edged silver lining smiles
Drifting now on horizons new
Whale songs faint hallowing
Star sparkles in a wink
Of a teardrop awakening
From an illusion of us

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Written by Fledermaus (3301 comments posted) 25th February 2008
Some pretty images in this, but terrible grammar. I know it's poetry, and that people do use that as an argument/excuse to mess around with syntax, but it's a pity: The vocabulary used and the metaphors seem too beautiful to be combined with this style... 
 
I'm not claiming to be an expert, but it's just that this detracted from what could have been a very good poem.

Written by wt (137 comments posted) 25th February 2008
yup thanks 
done 
wt 

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