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Sunrise, Bollin Valley
By Koobla
24 February 2008



Sunrise, Bollin Valley

 

I am in Bollin Valley feeling, like my surroundings, sleepy and damp!

I came here as a kid, my memories are made of this;

Alive to detail now my life has accrued its own.

And this eerie light  is amassing and flattening itself,

As I do, along an earthly line on mid-distant wood

Its central expanding point spreads recognition

 

Outwards, suddenly snapping on like one of those new energy savings bulbs

And the whiteish noise greets the pure-whitening light

With detailed harmonies of individual birds realising

They are no longer brotherhood, but me! me! me!

And soon fingers of soft Bollin water align with the glow

To join airy friends practising scales on dark

 

And light tinkling peaks of shushhhinggg water

Wake up burdened grass that tickles my nose –

As it shakes green pacamacs free

Of glassbead dew  - and blades spring at my eye in relief and release,

Jerking my head to complete God’s domino effect,, ha! ha! ha!

Alive and awake now, but all in a dream.

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Written by NathanRoberts (277 comments posted) 24th February 2008
I particularly liked the phrase 'God's domino effect' which seemed to sum up the flowing flyby quality as if you were changing from man to bird to flowing water.  
 
It benefited from the odd human details (the pacamacs and energy bulbs) which kept the imagery anchored down. 
 
A night spent in this place, then a new day and you're rising up half smothered in dreams and memories yet more awake than ever?
Thanks, Nathan.
Written by Koobla (8 comments posted) 26th February 2008
I thought it might be a bit vague, but you picked up my intentions, most encouraging, thanks.

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