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By dylangrrl
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13 October 2005 |
a haiku about modern love The Pill small pink insurance; I will never see his face in that of my child
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Written by Raindog (6 comments posted) 13th October 2005 | | This is very good- I like the spaces and mood you've created. |
Written by amboline (183 comments posted) 9th November 2005 | | Wow... in so few words you've created a universe of untold stories, leaving so much to the imagination of the reader. WHY don't you want to see his face in your child? Is he dangerous, abusive, did he use you and abandon you... or is the WHY hidden in yourself for some reason... There are haiku competitions which pay out good money from time to time, and this is easily worthy of a prize. | brilliant
Written by no1butClo (337 comments posted) 2nd December 2006 | reading this remembers to me turning sixteen and endless conversations I had with friends
well, well written
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Written by sueas (8 comments posted) 2nd December 2006 | Agree with amboline.
really good.
Maybe you would have liked to have seen is face in your child? |
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