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Just another drink to the New Year
By Matthiasrising
29 February 2008
I don't drink, take hits, or shoot up. You'll read between the lines. I hope.


To look up, More. Scored by PF.

Bite my tongue.

Staple my lips.

 

Just one hit. Just one shot.

I need my fix, I need my dose.

The radiant light is pure horse,

And I have found that I need more.

I have been building my castle for so long,

I had forgotten what feeling was.

The radiant light is my map home.

Pure horse, pure horse and home.

 

Oh Ibiza. I’m lost and degrading,

Bent on a few choice words.

Magic phrases: you might have been the one.

Key words piling up around me,

Wishing the leads culminated in my favor,

But I know what always comes next.

Oh Ibiza. Don’t do it again.

Just one hit. Just another shot.

 

Bite my tongue till it bleeds.

Staple my lips so I don’t do it again.

When we are alone,

The light radiates energy

Like a solar storm.

Everything is warm for a while,

Then I’m off again.

 

If I say the wrong thing,

Will you forgive and forget?

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Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3351 comments posted) 28th February 2008
It's a brave attempt, to try and get into the mindset of someone like that if you've never been there and as I've never been there I don't know how successful you've been.[if you see what I mean?] Seemed quite plausible, though I only know Ibiza as an island not a drug, and I didn't get the reference to riding horses home 
cheers 
Jane

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