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Rambling Iamb By Iamb From Monometer to Decameter |
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By patterjack
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04 March 2008 |
Iambic is not inextricably linked to pentameter.
I stopped at ten iambs to the line because
firstly :I had said what I wanted to say ,
secondly : it might have stretched beyond the page bounds
Rambling Iamb By Iamb from Monometer to Decameter
I write.
I write a lot.
I set down much and yet
I never write to earn the cash
nor ever write for later years at all.
I hope that when my time has come without a doubt
I leave my children words to keep alive their thoughts of me.
I doubt that generations past the time of those of latest birth
will spend the hours in searching through the dusty files in darkly hidden caves
to resurrect some verses meaning nothing more than whispers lost in winter's winds .
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Written by fellpony (1715 comments posted) 4th March 2008 | | Very witty way of making your point, Brian! |
Written by Josie (2845 comments posted) 4th March 2008 | | You have clearly shown us your iambic feet Brian. I was never taught these things, yet I have a poem which I wrote for the school magazine when I was only 11. I have a clear beat right through it and it has been written with trochees, the opposite of the iambic feet, eg: TUM-ti TUM-ti etc. My poem was in quatrains, ie, four beats per line, and this is my preferred method of writing, which many people like. I didn't know these words then, and although the poem is really good for a little girl, nobody gave me any encouragement or taught me about these things. I've left it late in life to learn about them, but I think they are worth learning. Prose split into small lines is not poetry as far as I am concerned for our language is so lyrical. For me, writing without using the lyrics of our language is like painting without using paint. |
Written by Veronica_Milvus (749 comments posted) 4th March 2008 | A technical triumph! and also managing to say something quite wistful along the way.
All the iambs perfectly formed. I am much happier with these than with trochees. Am I right in thinking that nursery rhymes are often trochees? Pop goes the weasel springs to mind.
Nobody liked my anapaests... ("A Cavalier") except me! Maybe we save that challenge for later, once we have got the "two beats to the bar" squared away. | Wow
Written by mia_ms_kim (1057 comments posted) 4th March 2008 | I know little about the technics of poetry. All I know is if it speaks to me. So a comment from me who is 'tone-deaf'
The gradually lengthening lines takes me gently into deeper and more involved thought process -- until I'm floored by the last two lines. The overall effect for me is, I get the feeling those whispers will echo on and on...contrary to what the poet is saying. (Don't know if that's what I'm supposed to be feeling?  )
Mia | More flattering comments I feel ...
Written by patterjack (1433 comments posted) 4th March 2008 | ... than the piece deserved .
It began as no more than an exercise , and then alas yes , my age-derived angst managed to creep in ,though fortunately giving me a place to bring it to an end .
Enough of strict constructs , I cry. Ideally let form and content blend to make a whole -- let us neither corset the verse technically , nor yet let it dribble over the page like a Dali watch .
patterjack |
Written by Phil (6959 comments posted) 7th March 2008 | Age derived angst - or - sensitivity and honesty? Perhaps an exercise, but still with some emotion invested and with plenty to communicate.It may be written in iambs - but it's poetry because of the content, not the form.
Phil |
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