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Written by fellpony
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05 March 2008 |
Tanka.
In the winter hedge
still twigs gleam sharp with sunshine.
Little long-tailed birds
tumble, a breath of feathers
alive and brisk as the light.
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Were they blue ?
Written by patterjack (1159 comments posted) 5th March 2008 | Are those birds in the hedges still
Or were they scared off by Benny Hill ?
patterjack
By the way , I like the tanka
But Benny Hill-- well , he was a vulgar comedian |
Written by fellpony (1580 comments posted) 5th March 2008 | | Trust you! No, they were long-tailed tits (the thinking woman's response to a man's interest in blue tits?). The first time I've ever seen them, though Graham said he saw them nesting in a field hedge last year. | Hanka for a Tanka
Written by NathanRoberts (277 comments posted) 5th March 2008 | I'm very new to all the different forms of poetry and hadn't heard of Tanka.
The wonders of wikipedia quickly enlightened me and led to a heightened appreciation of your piece.
I also learned,
'When a person sends a 'haiku' to a friend, it is a custom to send back a tanka.'
What a friendly bunch, the Japanese.
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Written by Fledermaus (3238 comments posted) 5th March 2008 | | Nice title... Nice poem. Isn't it strange that foreigners often know the other meaning first? |
Written by audrie (444 comments posted) 5th March 2008 | Well, of course, the title was designed to grab attention!
I wonder how many men would have logged on if Sue had used 'Long Tailed Tits' as her title??
It's a lovely little verse, pity about the title! |
Written by Phil (6645 comments posted) 7th March 2008 | No idea what a tanka is - but it captured a moment/scene wonderfully. 'Tumbled' does it very nicely.
Phil |
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