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False Prophets
Written by fellpony
09 March 2008
Don’t believe the blackbird.
He’s precocious, starts to sing
false golden trails of promises
of love and nests and hatching
in New Year’s twilight.

Never mind old cock-robin.
North wind or snow, his shout
and his puffed bright chest
are war, not love; “get the hell out,
I’ll keep my garden.”

Don’t trust the bald-faced rook.
Shaking wings, he croaks pretence
of song, but he’s a fraud
with his blueblack iridescence;
postures, but won’t build.

But let the truth-teller sing
his moorish music; haunted flute
blown here on the southern gales.
The sober bird in the tweed suit,
the curlew is spring.

Reviews

Written by NathanRoberts (277 comments posted) 9th March 2008
This is very good. It feels fresh yet timeless.  
 
It's very well observed - the blackbird's high failure rate at nesting........ and we're so fond of the robin's beautiful colours that we tend to forget what they signify in the language of birds.

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3566 comments posted) 9th March 2008
I loved the poem.It was beautifully written and full of bucolic charm and I liked the subtle hint of a rhyme you gave it. But I must say I would rather not know about the birds and live in ignorance and just enjoy all their twitterings that tell us that spring is on it's way. Ignorance really is bliss this time 
cheers 
Jane

Written by Fledermaus (3487 comments posted) 9th March 2008
Very nice poem indeed. I guess it's totally springtime over there in Cumbria?

Written by Veronica_Milvus (749 comments posted) 9th March 2008
I love it, especially the blackbird's "false golden trails of promises" And I like the fact that is the "sober bird in the tweed suit" who tells us the truth, not the pompous poseurs. Hooray for spring.

Written by Phil (6959 comments posted) 9th March 2008
Enjoyed this. Subtle rhyme noted by me too. Lovely final verse. 
 
Phil
Hi Sue
Written by jean.day (2366 comments posted) 9th March 2008
I too enjoyed reading this. Poor birds of all kinds in this wind today.
Casual artistry
Written by patterjack (1433 comments posted) 10th March 2008
And ornithological to boot ! 
 
Quite the twitcher !!!  
 
We have robins , but not the classic one of the nursery rhyme , imported blackbirds , but no rooks and a curlew of our own  
 
patterjack

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