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With You, Without You
By Bagheera
10 March 2008
This bit of a  "♪♪ Somebody done somebody wrong song♪♪" in typical Country & Western tradition snuck up behind me when I wasn't looking and insisted I write it down .......... can't get the melody out of my head, so I'll have to lay THAT ghost by fingering a few chords until I get it down on paper .........

With You, Without You

 

 

  1. I'm not one to hold you back, or plead for you to stay

And you won't see me crying as I watch you walk away

And leave me  ………  though you know it grieves me

After all this time ………………….

I wish I knew what I've done wrong: when did our love die?

How can I restore the flame? Would you even try----

Darlin' are you listening? ……..  or am I just whistling……..

In the wind? --------

 

Chorus            

                   You say you can't live with me, but I can't live without you

                   You say you need to find yourself, I've found I'm nothing without you

                   You say your love's grown cold: I say I'll just grow old

                   I'll always be in love with you, without you

 

  1. I can't forget how we first met, strangers in a strange land

Or how I felt my heart would melt when I first held your hand

I felt so fine ---  to know you were mine

And I was yours

Now you find you've changed your mind, we're strangers once again

You say we're through, but I'm telling you, my heart will still remain

Forever true -------- to only you

For  ever more

 

Chorus        You say you can't live with me, but I can't live without you

                   You say you need to find yourself, I've found I'm nothing without you

                   You say your love's grown cold: I say I'll just grow old

                   I'll always be in love with you, without you

 

 

Reviews
Hi Paul
Written by jean.day (2366 comments posted) 9th March 2008
Lovely song - but sad. I like the chorus particularly well, and find that I can sing it without knowing your melody.
A better kind of angst
Written by patterjack (1433 comments posted) 10th March 2008
than we usually get here !  
 
patterjack

Written by Josie (2845 comments posted) 10th March 2008
Bagheera, your lovely words need to be read with the music that is intended to accompany them. Where can we hear the music online? Poetry, song, music are all linked. In fact didn't song come before poetry way back in the beginning? Poetry needs to be read aloud, and listened to. Our lovely lyrical language, with its stresses within words, with the voice rising and falling, speaking slowly and quickly, lays itself wide open to song and poetry. I put my poems with my voice recording on my own website. Firstly it enhances the poems if you hear the writer of the poem read their own work, and secondly, of course, it helps children and ESL students with reading and pronunciation of our difficult language. It's a pity we don't have a section on GW for songwriters, and the facility for recording sound with it.

Written by Fledermaus (3487 comments posted) 10th March 2008
Nice one. Would be better with music though. It's often a bit hard to imagine songtexts without a tune.

Written by Phil (6959 comments posted) 10th March 2008
Very C&W. Would like to hear them sung. I wonder if ed/nascent could be persuaded to allow MP3 files to be posted? 
 
Phil
Thanks, Phil ........
Written by Bagheera (683 comments posted) 10th March 2008
:grin ...... not sure if this technophobe/dinosaur would know HOW to post it as an MP3 ..... I always thouight it had something to do with the geneeral level of intelligence of the average politician: they go round in threes because that way you get one who can READ, one who can WRITE and one who can tell the TIME .......... :eek :grin

Written by audrie (454 comments posted) 11th March 2008
Lovely song, in minor keys, I assume.  
 
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