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( warning, this is tragic)
By punchy
11 March 2008


The kettle's boiled
The tea bag's in
But tears they drip
Down to my chin
For sad I feel
So much despair
Within my fridge
No milk is there
I sigh with grief
Oh what to do
I want a cup
My favourite brew
Without the milk
It seems so wet
Transparent tea
I do not get
With head hung low
I back to bed
I'll spend my day
Asleep instead.

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Written by Fledermaus (4146 comments posted) 11th March 2008
Brilliant! And a splendid title.
Another great poem
Written by mr_soul (133 comments posted) 11th March 2008
Another great one punchy. I didn't know whether to laugh or cry with this one lol. what I really like about it is its obviously light-hearted and humourous, but also gives way to sadness. If you look deeper into it you see someone who seems a bit down and depressed, yet it deals with there being no milk left for tea which gives it a not so serious tone. 
Very cleverly done. It made me laugh, people can relate to looking forward to something but having the disappointment of not finding what you need, and for people, like myself, who like to look deeper into things there's a lot going on to get the old brain thinking..... 
Great, I really enjoyed this one.
Really liked it
Written by nsperfect71 (44 comments posted) 11th March 2008
Great rythm...read it out loud to enjoy it. Loved reading about the everyday objects; kettle, fridge, teabag, etc..in a new light.

Written by punchy (576 comments posted) 12th March 2008
Cheers peops. x

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