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By audrie
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12 March 2008 |
Thought I'd have a go at these haikus! Having said what I did about poetic metre on Fledermaus's poem!
The metre of verse
With its iambs a-plenty
Restricts the spirit. |
Written by patterjack (1095 comments posted) 11th March 2008 | does this then suggest
that only prose has the means
to portray spirit ?
and this haiku , though technically correct in syllable count , goes entriely against the *feel* of haiku]
Meter , and to my mind, rhythm in particular, enhance verse /poetry
And it is a very different rhythm from prose rhythms , which have their own importance
patterjack |
Written by fellpony (1520 comments posted) 12th March 2008 | The trouble is that Haiku are not usually written to discuss abstract things. They paint a stylized sketch of something concrete, and preferably natural. [This isn't the place for a lesson on haiku and I am not an expert, though I enjoy writing them.]
With Brian on this one Audrie, but good on you for having a bash at a new form. | No, Brian,
Written by audrie (444 comments posted) 12th March 2008 | but I think the 'originality' , probably a better word than 'spirit', can sometimes be lost if the author is struggling too hard to get the metre too perfectly correct.
As I have said, with my second attempt at a haiku, I was never taught poetry and really don't know much about the construction of the genre, especially not haiku, so you'll have to forgive my ignorance. You'll probably feel the new one is not right either, but I just like to play around with words, I'm afraid I don't take it too seriously.
I'm always willing to have a bash, Sue, but I do find all the talk about metre, just lately, is rather tedious. But I do like the rhythm to be right. |
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