Early sun,
the rose
petal,
One clear crystal
drop of dew,
Perfection.
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Written by punchy (372 comments posted) 13th March 2008 |
Thats simple and refreshing. It brought an instant picture and feeling to mind.
nice one
paula x |
Written by Diddi (80 comments posted) 13th March 2008 |
Thank you, I'm not a poet, but I got reading about Haiku last night, and I thought 'how hard is that?'  then I had a try.  this is the end result of eleven writings until 1:30 am. I quit now  |
Written by Robru (125 comments posted) 13th March 2008 |
Well done,Lis my love. One of the better Haiku's I have read. Just a single thought in seventeen wrods. Excellent.  Love, Bob |
very pretty
Written by fellpony (1507 comments posted) 13th March 2008 |
but not a haiku - haiku is three lines, with set syllable pattern 5,7,5.
Forget the labels though, it's a sweet image. |
Written by Diddi (80 comments posted) 13th March 2008 |
| It's not Haiku yet, I agree. It may be after another dozen edits. The problem is trying to hold the single thought. I'm enjoying the experience. |
Written by Fledermaus (3159 comments posted) 13th March 2008 |
| Short and clear. Not a haiku indeed, but a clever poem. |
Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3133 comments posted) 13th March 2008 |
Well whatever it is it's a really beautiful image
Why not start your own form. That was 3-4-4-3 Could it be a Diddi-esque?
I don't know why we can't start up new ones.
Shouldn't form fit content, that makes more sense to me.
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Written by Phil (6383 comments posted) 13th March 2008 |
Yep. Lovely image, captured well. Forget the label and enjoy it as it is.
Phil |
Written by Lizzy (781 comments posted) 13th March 2008 |
You painted a lovely picture in words.
Lizzy |
Written by Diddi (80 comments posted) 14th March 2008 |
My own self immortalised in a new Haiku form? It must be the avatar working.
Thank you all for your comments, they have been most welcome and have surprised me. I shall leave it alone for the time being.
Lis(Diddi) |
Written by book_worm (13 comments posted) 15th March 2008 |
Instantly brought a beautiful image to mind.
Haiku Schmaiku.....it works |
Written by Diddi (80 comments posted) 16th March 2008 |
| Thank you book_worm. Haiku Schmaiku - I love that! What a great pen name if I ever grow out of Diddi |
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