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Poetry
Honest
By MaxCarey
13 March 2008
When we lack the courage to voice the questions in our minds, I guess the coward's way out is to lie to ourselves and others in the hope that one day we'll believe.

This is my first submission on this site and the first poem longer than a haiku which I have written in years, so I'd love to hear critique!

Maybe you wonder too
Whether I think of you
As the day turns to night
And I turn out the light

And just maybe you dare
To believe that I care
What it is that you think
Now you've slept off the drink

How I wish I was sure
That you too yearn for more
Just a chance to reflect
And work out what it meant

But surely it is true
That I'm nothing to you
And that is fine you see
For you're nothing to me

Honest.

© Max Carey 2008

Reviews

Written by rachel1983 (12 comments posted) 13th March 2008
i love this 
it is something im sure almost everyone can relate to. 
it evoked feeling and provoked thought. 
very good

Written by mia_ms_kim (1054 comments posted) 14th March 2008
I agree with Rachel. Simple words, but very effective. Love the ending. I loved your intro even more. (I'm not very good at deciphering poems.) I just know if I like it or not.... 
 
Mia :)

Written by mr_soul (126 comments posted) 14th March 2008
Nice poem, I like this. I agree with everything said above, it was very effective in putting its point across and flowed very well. Good stuff

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