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A Sunset Memory
By fortunato364
14 March 2008

Firstly thanks to those that kindly reviewed "She's Leaving Home."  Given the slightest encouragement....Anyway, this is based on a personal memory.  The person addressed is not dead, but has simply moved on in life.  However, once written it did seem to cover the former possibility too, and perhaps rather better.


It crowned the day, as they so often do,
Blazed through the wide bay window,
Captivated and drew me into it,
To stand in thrall of God and nature.
The warm glow caressed the curtains,
Played around the arms of all the chairs,
Smiled across the carpet, and bathed my face.

At the very edge of my awareness,
I sensed you move into the room,
And, feeling much at home with you,
Held my gaze on the illuminated glass,
And made a wide arm of welcome.
I felt you docking at my side,
As if there by some divine will.

I drew my arm down to enfold you,
Felt the gentle weight of your head
Rest contented on my shoulder.
A light as bright and warm as this old sun,
Saying its goodnights with no regrets,
Before darkening and sinking in the sky,
Grew and filled my stomach and heart.

For just as surely as I knew there would be morning,
I had such faith that you would still be there to grace it.
And now in moments dark and light alike,
My blind faith tested to destruction,
And you in some strange place,
I stand at that window, and sense you at my side.

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Absolutely lovely
Written by Josie (2785 comments posted) 20th March 2008
Well, when I came to your poem I saw you had 32 hits but no reviews, and I am so surprised because I felt soaked into your poem in every way. I know you are gazing at a sunset - and you have a human being by your side - but for me, I felt that you also had God by your side, for I felt such a presence as you took me into this beautiful natural scene as you did. I especially felt this in the last three lines: "My blind faith tested to destruction, And you in some strange place, I stand at that window, and sense you at my side," for I thought that anyone's unbelief in God would be tested when gazing at the beautiful world in which we live Your description was of one of the "thin" places which I wrote about in the non fiction side - a hair breadth from Heaven. By the way: Welcome to Great Writing.

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