I shall leave the reader to check this one out.It is kind of emotional.
Pete was such a little chap
When he was passed to me.
He seemed to be quite nervous
And trembling, I could see.
I held him close and cuddled him,
Whispered nothings in his ear.
His clear brown eyes looked up at me
To show there was no fear.
We formed a bond there and then,
With time it just grew stronger,
Always we were the best of friends;
I wish it were much longer.
At times he was so mischievous,
At others he was impish.
We both had a wondrous time
'Till his untimely finish.
The car that hit him didn't stop,
Just drove on down the road.
When I stooped to pick him up,
My heart bore an awful load.
I dug his grave up near the shed;
For Pete there tolls a bell.
Twelve years we had together,
Oh yes, I knew him well.
I cried a lot as I covered him,
My heart so very sad.
I'll miss his constant company,
Best dog I've ever had.
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Written by Josie (2785 comments posted) 15th March 2008 |
| Robru - I didn't get beyond the first verse and I knew exactly that your friend was your dog. I have written a poem also for the dogs in my life called "The Most Loyal Friends of All" and I really meant it. You will never get a human friend who can love you as much and as loyally as your four legged friend, and I am not the only one who thinks this. As for the poem itself, I liked the stead flow of your poem, the rhythm and the care that you've obviously taken to write it. With so much rubbish being written, it is pleasing to see your poem. |
Written by Fledermaus (3306 comments posted) 15th March 2008 |
| Ah. What a sad poem. But well written. |
Written by beatricelouise (215 comments posted) 15th March 2008 |
Enjoyed this one. You hooked me to the end. I didn't suspect at all that Pete was a dog. So silly of me. It was a tear jerker all right. Good work!  |
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Written by maipenrai (783 comments posted) 15th March 2008 |
as a dog lover i liked this, a good write.
bernie |
Written by Robru (219 comments posted) 15th March 2008 |
To Josie, You are the only person so far who twigged that it was about a dog early in the poem. Most don't realise until about the middle.
To Fledermaus, It is a sad poem. Thank you for your support
To Beatricelouise, You made my day when you said :-"You hooked me to the end". Thank you.
To Bernie, thank you for your support also.
Now to everyone, I am pleased that you found this such a sad poem. In actual fact Pete is right now lying under my computer desk waiting for me to take him for a ride round the farm to check the cows. I think my writing may be getting somewhere. Thank you all. Sorry about the apparent deception in the poem.Cheers to everyoner, Bob |
Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 16th March 2008 |
Would make a goo country and western song.
Never having had a dog, I can't identify with the feeling - he the emotion is clearly there.
Phil |
Written by mia_ms_kim (1019 comments posted) 16th March 2008 |
I found your confession in your review the best part of this work. Not implying your poem wasn't good. Just that the jaw-drop revelation had me annoyed at first (you made me feel deep sympathy while you were probably trembling with laughter). Then I cracked up at the hilarity of it.
Wonderful!
Mia |
Written by Robru (219 comments posted) 17th March 2008 |
I can't sing for nuts so don't see the country and western song, but Pete is a very loyal and faithful hound dog. Thanks Phil for you approval.
To Mia, No I was not trembling with laughter. I wrote the poem for a contest on another site. I used Pete's name as it sounded better than Kriska for the purposes of the poem. A little truth mixed in with fiction.I thank you for you comment and apologise for letting the cat out of the bag as I did. |
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