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gaijin neo-punks inject raw blue sun |
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By headsfromspace
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29 March 2005 |
Greetings from America. This micro-fiction piece is part of a series
of 5 done for my website and also posted at The New Absurdist. I've
tried to post links here but unfortunately neither correct HTML or the
BBedit seems to be working right now so I'll post the links in raw
format below: http://emptyhead.rumble.sy2.com/microdot/death.html http://www.absurdist.cc/ Update Oct 05: For those wishing to read more micro-fiction, check out
the site I help to edit. There are some great short stories of
around 500 words. http://rumble.sy2.com They hunch dejected on the artificial reefs of Tokyo. Sluggish
advert blimps drawn by body heat hover overhead, bumping each other
softly and flashing 15 second spots on hi-rez mylar screens that shiver
in the wind. The storm has subsided, but twenty lie dead in the coffin
of the micro-sub at the bottom of the bay. Rescued was a black laminate
box containing glass vials of blue sun, a rabid form of
methanphetamine. Eli prepares the syringes. His hair is still wet and
plastered to his head like flat black daggers. After the injections
come visions of snow monkeys rising from the waves. The punks throw
stones at the blimps for fun, setting off automatic alarms: tin voices
screaming in Japanese. |
Wierd Written by Odaisis (5 comments posted) 31st March 2005 | | I never read micro-nfiction so this is new to me. I half get, half don't. Either post ther other 5 or maybe add a few more sentences to clearify what your saying. Anyway I think its wierd and unique(and I like that). | I like it Written by KitKat (6 comments posted) 5th April 2005 | Micro fiction is new to me too, but if it's all like this then I guess its some crazy fusion of short story, reportage and haiku. This reads like a scene from a longer SF story. I really like how you paint the picture - introducing futuristic concepts without allowing us to pause for breath. That's how SF should be. I guess though, if this is 'micro-fiction' I'd prefer to see a complete story written in as many words, rather than a scene. But maybe that's asking too much. | Just one slice Written by Betsie (30 comments posted) 14th April 2005 | | I enjoyed the style of the writing and the genre. But I felt it was just one slice from the middle of something. We don't know why they are there and we don't know the outcome. Micro fiction? I've heard of flash fiction here - but that usually means a short story with beginning middle and end written in very few words. Sometimes 50 sometimes 60 sometimes 100 or 500 - whatever brief a given publication stipulates. | Micro or Flash? Written by headsfromspace (7 comments posted) 15th April 2005 | Thanks for your comments Betsie. Many writers dislike the term "flash fiction" and some substitute the term "micro-fiction" to refer to extremely short, stripped to the core stories, a very popular form on the web. The emphasis is on no wasted words. For me, "micro" is the equivalent of punk rock, fast and furious, though I don't claim to be proficient in the form. | Don't like it. Written by DustinBowcott (66 comments posted) 1st May 2005 | | Not a complete story, although judging from the few sentences available you definitely have a talent. | talented Written by allyj (4 comments posted) 5th October 2005 | i wish i had your talent,i love to write,but am still at the begining of it all,studing all i can get my hands on,some day i will be able to write better then you,but for now,well done |
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