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Pre-Adolescent Bicycle Crash
By mr_soul
16 March 2008
I probably would have ditched this ages ago if I wasn't so fond of the title. Something I have been working on now for perhaps too long. But, well, perhaps against my better judgement, I shall reveal......

Well it was down at the hill
When I broke the wheel
I’d spun the top
And forgotten to stop
Only applied the brakes
When it was too late
Well it’s a wonder I can even think at all

Well I seen the girl
And bent metal
It was there in your eyes
But I was surprised
I’m feeling things I’ve never felt before
But nobody’s telling me what they are!
Well it’s a wonder I can even live at all

So I’m still lying here
These demons of fear
Take it away with my hand
To a different land
But these new games
Do make me feel ashamed
And still no one wants to come near to me at all

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Written by Phil (6719 comments posted) 16th March 2008
I like the title too - but I'm also with you on the main body of work, I'm afraid. Probably a piece worth pursuing, but in its present form a lumpy, and in laces, confusing read. 
 
Phil

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