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Poetry
Half ok
By miss_castle
23 October 2005

About a relationship where everybody has an opinion about it until you eventually are no longer sure whether you are better with or without him.


I'm half alive
but I feel like half way dead
I make believe
so your lies will make me less upset
I fear the right
for all I'm used to doing is wrong and
I'm far away
But when the summer comes I pray for storm


And I don't know if it's too late to leave him
and I have been told the longer you stay the harder it flickers
as a rock in the bottom of my shoes
hurting now and then making me feel so confused
and everybody has an opinion about the best cure


I'm still asleep
but I successfully fooled everyone around me
they say I please
and I'm pretty easy going when I stay without you
it's my socour
for times when tracks lead back to empty reasons
give me some clues
I climb walls ceilings but nobody hears me...

And I dont know if its too late to love him
and I have been told the longer you take the harder it lingers
as a song in the bottom of my lungs
screaming now and then making me feel so unsure

and everybody has an opinion
about the best cure.

I'm half ok
of course I am, what did you expect me to say?
Is that alright?
I might just change my tone for you,but I still won't change my mind.

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I know the feeling
Written by redwolf (9 comments posted) 23rd October 2005
You say it exactly to the word, and express what most don't even want to contemplate. Makes a few of us wake up and realise that maybe we should take that fearful jump. 
It's a scary feeling and we hope that everyone else can tell us what to do, sometimes. Other times wish they would butt out :grin
But the poem says exactly what i'm feeling. 
And that makes a good poet. 
 
:) Red
:)
Written by miss_castle (7 comments posted) 27th October 2005
thank you red. :grin

Written by amboline (183 comments posted) 9th November 2005
This reads very much like a song. Is there a tune to go with it? (could you produce one, if not?).

Written by miss_castle (7 comments posted) 11th November 2005
yes there is a tune to go with it :)

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