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The Hour After Midnight
By book_worm
19 March 2008

I'd like to thank Josie, as reading her work has inspired this first ever attempt at something for children.
This is exactly as typed as it came into my head, with no reworking. (Sorry if it shows!). Laughing

Tess.


It is the hour after midnight
And all children are asleep.
When something stirs under the moonlight
And beady eyes begin to peep.

You'll hear the sound of whispers
And the pattering of paws.
Even muffled giggles
Or the squeaking of a door.

If ever you hear these sounds
Never even open your eyes.
For the magic spell will be broken
And you'll spoil the lovely surprise.


For if you should awaken
The magic will end very quick.
For it is only when we are sleeping
That teddy bears get up to their tricks.


Reviews
Given Inspiration? Ooooh Good! ha ha
Written by Josie (2780 comments posted) 20th March 2008
Tess - Oh, how kind! Giving inspiration to others must surely be the goal of every chidren's writer. I don't know if you are a child, but you have done so well for your first attempt. Yes, I could see a few things which need attention, but for a first try it is surely better than mine was. Well done!
Thanks
Written by book_worm (13 comments posted) 20th March 2008
Actually, I'm 38!! :roll  
 
Would love to know what you feel needs attention though, as that's why I've posted it. After all, I'd like to do better next time :)

Written by Fledermaus (3246 comments posted) 20th March 2008
Ah very nice! Great rhyme and rhythm. I can see the inspiration from Josie, as her poems often have a similar style, but you delivered it in your own manner. Well done!

Written by punchy (500 comments posted) 23rd March 2008
I enjoyed this and I too am 38.  
(The idea of teddy's coming to life when we sleep scared the pants off me as a kid and to be honest still bothers me now :roll
I think the Rhythm could be tweaked to make it easier to read but that's all  
Paula x 

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