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A Crushed Rose
By sam_duke
19 March 2008

This was written as a kind of instant personal reflection on the death of someone I myself didn't know very well, but who was known and loved dearly by many people I knew and found myself around on the day this happened.

I can't help but feel this poem is rather distant, and diminishes the loss of someone dear as a mere abstraction. But anyway, I'll leave you to make your own judgements...


Our garden green, so rich and fair,
Lies grey, its senses all asleep:
A dewy rose of youth’s fresh morn
Is crushed, her gentle beauty torn,
And all the florets for her weep.

 

The ones that only know her face
May well have lost their oldest friend;
Whilst those who’ve lost a dear loved one,
Whose hearts today are ripped undone,
Are struck by wounds that ne’er can mend.


Frail spring grass trembles in the wind
That chills the air beneath the sun
Which shines to mourn a precious one:
For that sweet rose may be forever gone,
But in our hearts and in our souls

     she shall live on.

 

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Written by margarita (30 comments posted) 19th March 2008
hello there 
i love the landscape and physical images in this poem. You can write about the seasons with a very apt tone, I love the lines 
"Frail spring grass trembles in the wind 
That chills the air beneath the sun 
Which shines to mourn a precious one:" 
It's a really soft connection. I don't think it's distant or cold..the language seems personal and well thought out. :)

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