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By Veronica_Milvus
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21 March 2008 |
In which I bewail the fact that my poetic ideas only ever come to me when I am supposed to be working.
MORNING MUSE
I am a morning poet, and my lines
are forming in my head as the warm sun rises
acting as my muse in her various guises
the words crystallising as she shines.
Out driving, early, down the country lane
the image of a poem past my windscreen flashes
a rainbow-coloured rhyme from the wet road splashes
insinuates a rhythm in my brain.
I scribble down the verses when I can
on the backs of envelopes and meeting minutes
I have to do my day job, but my heart's not in it
There are no poems in our project plan.
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Written by fellpony (1715 comments posted) 21st March 2008 | | Witty. It's funny how a car journey can be a source of useful musing. |
Written by mr_soul (126 comments posted) 21st March 2008 | I liked this veronica. As fellpony said, very witty. I think everyone on here could probably identify with dreaming of our next plans while supposed to be doing other things lol.
Its a nice piece, great effort |
Written by gutterkitty (362 comments posted) 21st March 2008 | | Charming, and as Mr Soul says, easy to relate to (I wrote my last poem on the back of a map I found in the car when I was travelling). I could easily step into the shoes of the narrator and I particularly enjoyed the descriptions of the poem forming in their head. The rhyme is subtle and the ending made me laugh. | Me too! - ie morning person
Written by Josie (2845 comments posted) 22nd March 2008 | | I see that you followed the rhyming pattern which I used for my Easter poem Veronica. It is difficult to get both the meaning an the rhyming correct isn't it? Challenging is the word. (Petrarch new this). I see you were using iambic pentameter, but I am not sure that "am" shoudl be a heavy stress? I may be wrong as I am only learning as you are. I would say you have done a very good job with this poem Veronica as I know how difficult it is. I liked the subject material too, and I go along with you. I always get my best ideas first thing in the morning. I guess our minds are more awake then. |
Written by Phil (6959 comments posted) 22nd March 2008 | Enjoyed. Cars do present rhythms all of their own. If you're driving at a steady speed so he engine is revving at a constant - they also have their own musical key. (Hoovers and washing machines too!) Try singing your verse back to the car.
Evening/late night person myself.
Phil (Not mad BTW) |
Written by Veronica_Milvus (749 comments posted) 22nd March 2008 | In reply to Josie
Maybe "I am" was a spondaic substitution? LOL
Don't know I'm doing it, sometimes. |
Written by Fledermaus (3487 comments posted) 22nd March 2008 | | Continue doing so. I write them whenever I'm in the mood for writing them, but if this is how they come to you, you'd better have a notebook ready at all times. | Muse
Written by patterjack (1433 comments posted) 30th June 2008 | Mine's one who prods me when I am otherwise occupied . usually with something mental when I should be concentrating on the physical.
Neat verses !
patterjack |
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