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Welcome to our home, Scott.
By Diddi
23 March 2008
Scott is a dear friend. I wrote this for him. He's an American who wants to visit Australia. We're speaking again now.

It's so exciting, Scott is coming to visit us. Unfortunately he can only stay overnight, and he is coming all this way into the Australian Bush just to meet us. I have been cleaning and tidying up all day, cooking delights and making home baked bread and scones. I just hope he has a sweet tooth. I think I'll just make a few herbal cookies, they won't take long, fifteen minutes tops. They'll relax him after his long flight and rather long drive. I hope my directions bring him right to our door. Oh! Is that him at the gate? I do hope so, I've been longing to meet this lovely man.

It is! He's here! My heart is fluttering, I feel like a silly school girl on a first date. I pat my hair as I stand on the verandah as the city hire car comes up the long drive. It comes carefully, beeping horn sending the Cockatoos screeching in flight before him. The dogs bark excitedly, tails wagging.

Penny, the blue cattle dog, sends her tail spinning in a flurry as the little car gets nearer. Peter, the big red dog, huffs and puffs with excitement, and little Taffy barks furiously.

"Bob, he's here!" I almost scream, we have waited so long for this day. "Scott's here at last!"

I am so excited I'm clapping my hands, which makes the dogs more unruly.5

"Shut up! Go to BED!" I yell to the dogs, and they settle for a brief moment beside me.

Bob comes round the side of the house as the car pulls in close to the house. Bob pulls the driver's door open and almost wrenches Scott out of the car and enfolds him in one of his great, warm hugs. I can almost see Scott's eyes popping out of his head. Such lovely eyes and so clear.

I run off the verandah and to the car. I fling my arms around Scott and I feel his strength. I am surprised at his bulk, he's not fat, but quite muscular. I wrap my arms around him and Bob, and we walk to the house. The dogs are barking excitedly and jumping around. Scott doesn't seem to mind the dogs and their bouncy ways, he didn't mind when Peter stuffed his nose into his crotch, Scott only winced a little. That was polite of Scott.

"Welcome to our home, Scott." I smiled warmly at him. He looked down at me and said, "My, you're smaller than I thought you would be." I laughed as he looked up at Bob, grinning,

"You're pretty tall, Bob" Bob winked and said, "I have to be, Scott, It's the only way I can overpower that little dynamo!"

"Oh, for goodness' sake, get up to the house and out of this hot sun, Scott'll cook in this heat!" I bossed them. "Sit on the verandah and I'll bring something cold, what would you like Scott? A cold beer, a soft drink, iced tea?" I busied around, setting chairs and such.

"I think I'd like one of your home brewed beers thanks." I grinned with delight and looked at Bob, he nodded. "Coming right up, fellas."

Presently I returned with a couple of bottles of my special home brew. I put them on the table with a couple of glasses and a jug, and sat down by them. I opened one bottle and poured it carefully into the jug, then filled the glasses. Bob nodded to Scott and they both took a glass. Judging by the look on Scott's face, he was liking my beer. I offered some of my cookies to them and Scott started munching my herbal cookies.

"These are delicious, what do you put in them?" Scott mumbled,"They're so moreish."

"Oh, this and that, Scott, whatever is in my herb garden at the time."

Scott put his empty glass down and stretched his arms lazily over his head, yawning. " Jet lag and the drive must be getting to me, but it's so lovely meeting you both at last." He gave another giant yawn, "I'm sorry to be such dull company."

"No, Scott, the clean air has just got to you a little, come lean forward and I'll massage your neck, then you can have a shower to freshen up before supper, we're having a barbecue with the neighbours this evening, they'll be here in an hour, lean forward, that's a good lad." Scott leaned forward, still yawning, I put my hand on his forehead, as I felt the tight muscles at the back of his neck, I worked them to release the knots, then pulled his head back and cut his throat quickly and cleanly. He hardly gurgled. It was one of my better kills.

The dogs began barking and carrying on. "Shut up! Yes, It's 'bone day.' You'll get yours soon."

"Shall I ring the neighbours?" Bob asked.

"No love, let's have a beer first, It's bloody hot today."


Reviews

Written by philkent (157 comments posted) 23rd March 2008
Pretty good Diddi, I enjoyed this a lot. I loved the cutesy down home style that suddenly takes a dark twist. In light of the denoument the way she hugged him/felt where the best cuts were, the herbal biscuits and the neighbours coming over for a barbecue all had a chilling double meaning. 
 
I wasn't completely surprised at the direction the story went in but it still had enough shock value to keep it fresh and entertaining. I hope your American friend isn't too traumatised. :grin  
 
Phil

Written by Lizzy (822 comments posted) 23rd March 2008
I did enjoy the story and the twist at the end. The herbal biscuits did get me wondering. 
I was puzzled about their relationship prior to the visit, why was he visiting them? 
A good well paced story 
Lizzy

Written by mia_ms_kim (1054 comments posted) 23rd March 2008
Dear Lord! I didn't expect that ending in my wildest dreams. The above reviews make the story even more chilling. I just didn't make the association - I thought it was going to be a lovely story about outback hospitality! 
 
Just one crit comment. 
 
I thought you could space out the dialogues, ie, one line per speech. It was at a little bit confusing who was doing the speaking. 
 
Mia :eek

Written by bluecity (416 comments posted) 23rd March 2008
Me too. I thought it was going to be all about Australian hospitality and I was waiting for Scott to make some social gaff. 
 
A great twist which I didn't see this coming AT ALL! If I was going to fine-tune, I would say a bit too much not at all, Diddi. One or two hints earlier on would have made it perfect. 
 
Great story! 
 
Rosemary

Written by Diddi (80 comments posted) 23rd March 2008
:grin Thanks everyone. Scott asked his friends to 'kill' him imaginatively. So I did. :grin

Written by Leigh (237 comments posted) 8th April 2008
Nicely chilling piece. 
 
The "Unfortunately he can only stay overnight" line takes on a sinister note when you go back over it with hindsight! 
 
Like the "Yes, It's 'bone day.' You'll get yours soon" line. 
 
Could do with a bit of explanation though - why does the narrator kill Scott (and apparently many more visitors besides)?

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