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Poetry
Milky mouse
By punchy
23 March 2008



Melting on my tongue is the white and milky mouse
It trickles down my throat , as sweet as it is smooth
A comfort like a cure that warms the tasteless cold
Matching of the pleasure that is only found in snooze
 
Following the mouse comes the spiciness of blood
Fermented and in oaky age it tarnishes the soft
Its roughness but its strength has a powerful embrace
But when to cease these pleasures as they lift me to my loft

Reviews

Written by Fledermaus (3238 comments posted) 23rd March 2008
Ah... Chocolate? Or am I missing something?

Written by punchy (493 comments posted) 23rd March 2008
No you miss nothing, white chocolate and shiraz!

Written by Phil (6645 comments posted) 23rd March 2008
Chocolate and wine. Love them both - but together? Yuk. Each to their own though. Sounds like you're in heaven. 
 
Phil
foxed
Written by patterjack (1159 comments posted) 23rd March 2008
by mouse rather than mousse 
 
patterjack 
 
Patterjack
Written by punchy (493 comments posted) 24th March 2008
Definately mouse as in those little white ones they sell by the quarter in sweet shops ! Yum x
Not within my ken
Written by patterjack (1159 comments posted) 24th March 2008
So you must pardon my ignorance of white chocolate mice , but the overtones did throw me  
 
patterjack

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