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The Witch At Home
By margarita
25 March 2008
The moon hung in a sulk just above the trees
Better than hiding behind the bullish clouds
But nonetheless childish.
I tried my best to ignore the gloom and settled beside the hearth
The fire set alight to warm the cockles of my heart.
I knew I was weary but I could not sleep
My bed lay ruffled in a restless heap
I glared at it from the arm chair and sucked on my pipe.
The kettle bubbled and whistled
Like a teenager all unpredictable.
It's the way of it and the clock struck twelve.
Now time for a nightcap and shed the high heels.
These costumes are so unnecessary and the pain quite unbearable.
I have the powder in my pocket.
That is all the knowledge i need, no kinship to disapprove
No dutiful spouse to sweep it away.
I respect the solace of my temporary cave
A new wave in dwelling forest to space.
I will work my witch craft like a pensioner knits
All clicky and bunched up
Mysterious, the snapping turtle
The graze of light on the wall
The comfort in the full pot...the absolute essence of transience at home.

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Written by Josie (2780 comments posted) 25th March 2008
Margarita: You have some strange images in this poem, and for me I must say that they don't work. "The moon hung in a sulk" - and yet the moon lightens up the dark world of night in a beautiful way. Could you explain this please: "A new wave in dwelling forest to space." I really didn't understand it, yet I guess to you it is simple. Then I thought your similee "I will work my witchcraft like a pensioner knits all clicky and bunched up." But pensioner's don't knit in this way. I'm one - I don't. "The snapping turtle" - in what way "snapping"? HELP please  
josie
Written by margarita (29 comments posted) 25th March 2008
hey there, 
this is an old old poem that I'm still working through and I'm really glad you jumped on it with lots of feedback!  
Firstly: "The moon hung in a sulk" is not disregarding all the other symbols of the moon but its describing a point in the evening when the moon is low. I was likening that to a child hiding in their room, but quite specifically to sulking as that mood does seem to hang low, at least I have found it to be that way. I think the narrator wants the moon to lighten the dark but its not happening just yet. 
 
"A new wave in dwelling forest to space." this line refers to the temporary cave. The protagonist in this poem is a ghostly, shaman, perhaps even a witch. I see my typo in the line though! It should say from forest to space. The new wave is a reference to new wave music and I'm placing it in relation to a new way of living. This witch lives everywhere, in the forest or in the atmosphere. 
 
The pensioner reference isn't a categorical truism nor is the teenager reference thought to be. It is simply a way of showing you the very different rhythms in the principle character. Plus "all clicky and bunched up" was referring to the wool and needles not the pensioner! Similarly the bubbles and whistles were the hormones of the teenager. 
 
Snapping turtle: I've had an image in my head for sometime of how when humans bunch up they seem like turtles, heavy with a shell on their back, and sometimes would like no more to hide in their shell. I see the protagonist as both an old lady and young boy and its this constant shape shifting that are perhaps creating these dialectic images for you. 
 
This is just my practice room at the moment but I'm really trying to work on using landscape and inanimate objects to portray human emotion and character. 
Hope this explains things a bit better and again thanks for the comments. 

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