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White elephants
By emilio
27 March 2008
I enjoy the randomness of life's natural beauty; I offer no concepts or contemporary issues, sorry Phil...I know you like answers and explanations.
Just don't mix the spice with sugar.




    Wet handles as you climb
    Towards the luminous of
    Pleasure.
    Sinking in dream in the world
    Of wood and violence, blindly
    In search of treasure.
    Repeat your phrases father, don’t
    Bother, these foot-steps are in tune with
    The farther.
    Come near ephemeral fear, there waits
    A hand that organizes your thick pulses,
    It’s I you smear.
    Constant drifters roam these streets,
    Constant talks about infinite flocks and the
    Many faces that portray the Gods.
    Some grab the belly, others feet, one the tail,  then
    some
    With no treat; but whose
    To tell the enigmatic seed that fell?


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Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 27th March 2008
Ooo - a dedication! I was going to pass this one by but I feel it would be rude to do that now. For the record - I don't need, nor require, answers or explanations - I like coherence. It's your prerogative to deliver what you want.  
 
I'm tempted to paraphrase a review I received a while ago, I think you'll remember the one. 
 
You'll not be surprised to know this communicates little to me. Fair enough - I'm clearly not your target audience. I'll be interested to see what others make of it. I'm more than open to being enlightened. 
 
Phil 
 
 

Written by mia_ms_kim (1019 comments posted) 28th March 2008
I am thoroughly confused by this poem. I even looked up "white elephant" in wikipedia for clues. 
 
Mia :?

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