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Poetry
The Eremozoic
By PseudoMonkey
27 March 2008

on a shelf, her lines are drawn;
mythic creatures' transit code,
in reams of caustic form:
head and fore limb of an antelope,
trunk of wardrobe; hunted down
through low rent fashion outlet,
arrows pierce bargains.

She almost caught the Minoxid,
where male-patterned baldness glowed;
the fathered bird of Jove,
chasing wild disproportionate prey
on sordid boulevard,
to null or retirement,
the skull will decide.

She ensnared the louse,
then immersed the louse
in every potion marketed;
creamed the aisles, scooping the royalty
of fondant miracles,
packing every crevice
in an echt éclair of youth

applied with cottoned pollices
and third degree savagery.
She dreamt new toxins;cremated
dirt ball's trail, not content 'til sanity
of louse was cauterised:
carnal bark, wrapped in flypaper,
waiting for the dawn squall.

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Written by Veronica_Milvus (591 comments posted) 27th March 2008
I apologise for being one of those people who doesn't like the oblique, the obscure and the hinted. I have very little idea what this is about and unfortunately that is irritating to me! Is somebody going shopping here? Buying baldness cures, headlouse treatment and cotton wool? 
 
I like the language of the second half of the third stanza, starting "creamed the aisles... except I will have to look up what echt means. 
 
Give me a clue as to the subject matter please?

Written by stevetroster (1549 comments posted) 27th March 2008
PseudoMonkey or FauxHumanus  
 
“Eremozoic Era -- The Age of Loneliness.” 
 
Are you lonely, PseudoMember? Try joining in. 
 
:roll

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