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Poetry
Quiet Love
By DrivingMissDaisy
28 October 2005
Two souls entwined as one....

I watch you breathe as gently as you sleep.

Uninterrupted by love, as years go by.

Now we have so much more,

Minds embracing minds.

 

You say half-words and smile at your dream.

I touch your hand, as I grow old beside you,

Your fingers once smooth, now frail and bent.

I feel your pain inside of you, touching me.

 

I see the young man, who made me laugh,

So tall and strong, now small and weak.

No more jokes to tell, no memories of us.

Perhaps a feeling of once what was.

 

Just you and I, my one true love.

The children long gone, to nests of their own.

It's my turn now, to see us through.

I'll hold on tight, for both of us.

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Written by amboline (183 comments posted) 1st November 2005
Very, very poignant... don't really know what else to say. "Minds embracing minds" - lovely...
Thanx
Written by DrivingMissDaisy (2 comments posted) 1st November 2005
Thanxs Amboline, 
 
I appreciate your kind review and glad you enjoyed my poem. I've had it tucked away for some time but decided to bring it out of the closet, as it were! 
 
DMDx

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