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His Billy and His Bones
By NedWilson
29 March 2008
The thrill of composition!

Winter morning
Bitter cold
Words all frozen hard, behold!
The ghost makes fire in last night's stones
To warm his billy and his bones.

Frost dust blows
Down from the trees
Rhymes are useless, they just freeze!
But now the billy's on the fire
Spirit's rising higher and higher!

The gypsy camp
About to break
Dawn is bubbling in the sky
Fingers loose and words a pyre
Billy's boiling, bones on fire!


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Written by Phil (6683 comments posted) 29th March 2008
The change in rhyming structure (in the third) jarred the rhythm a little. Other than that, liked it. 
 
Phil

Written by NedWilson (26 comments posted) 30th March 2008
Thanks for your comments -always welcome. My unspoken thought was: chaos here resolves not only into rhyme but also into crescendo.

Written by NedWilson (26 comments posted) 30th March 2008
Previous. Dont forget jars can be useful too!

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