Why do people have to put all their problems, their broken hearts, their frustration with other poets on the website, their chagrin between
husband wife and everything else that should be written on a piece of paper and put down the toilet, on GW's nice poetry website? People sat in the Sahara Desert, and in the mountains of South America want something more interesting to read, don't they? On my website I can hone into exactly to where they are reading what I write, even to their street. Sometimes they are sat on a train or a cruise ship. ha ha I do know. Remember this when you're writing. So: Why has writing poetry become so therapeutic? Why not try pour your emotions into prose? I'd love to know the answer.
I’m bored, frustrated, feeling queer
“Put that down in poetry dear.”
I’m full of angst, but just can’t write.
My spelling’s bad, I’m not too bright.
I’m carrying around some inner hate –
That’s bearing down with so much weight.
I want to throw that hate around.
“Here’s a lovely website that I’ve found.”
Is that the place that I should be?
Just sitting writing poetry?
“Of course it is – pour out your heart.
Now, hands on keyboard, off we start.”
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Written by lauthiamkok (60 comments posted) 30th March 2008 | Hello Josie,
"Why do people have to put all their problems, their broken hearts, their frustration with other poets on the website"
Are you directing this to yourself??
This is my first "review" on your poem. But actually it is not a "review" just like what most people do here, they dont do reviews actually but something wasting time and wasting a life!
So having a "review" sometimes does not mean my/ your/ his/ her writing is fabulous. or having a bad "review" does not mean the writing is rubbish, some people just having a bad day or they are just a bad "reviewers".
Anyway, nice skill for all your writing so far I have seen. I am not a suitable reviewer to review your poetry yet, or until I come across something I can say something very nice and beautiful on your poetry.
If I cant something nice or helpful, better I just shut up and leave. |
Written by Josie (2496 comments posted) 30th March 2008 | | Hello Lauth: No, I am not directing that question to myself. I don't do this. I just wonder why so many people want the world to know of their inner problems, and in a poem too? Is it therapeutic? If I was directing the question to myself, I would know the answer, but I don't. I don't think that telling people you have enjoyed their poem is a waste, or, as I have been told this week that something wasn't quite right in a certain line, and a suggestion which was, in fact, a much better line than I had written. Your words, seen through someone else's eyes, can be different, and they can spot something wrong which, perhaps, you have not noticed. Not a waste of time. Very useful and a good reason to put work on GW before putting it anywhere else. |
Written by stevetroster (1398 comments posted) 30th March 2008 | I’m bored, frustrated, feeling queer
“Put that down in poetry dear.”
Fabulous opening two lines.
Here's a few seconds of my life given up to say: I enjoyed your poem.
All the best,
Steve.
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Written by Josie (2496 comments posted) 30th March 2008 | | Ha ha - - "feeling queer"??? Me, a grandmother. ha ha. I knew you would see the funny side Steve. Grannies have feelings too you know. |
Written by punchy (372 comments posted) 30th March 2008 | Nice one Josie, I sense you are getting a little more controversial of late and I like it.
I love spilling my emotions into a poem ,it's like verbal vomit ,it cleanses your mind. Much like dreams it helps us make sense of things.
This naturally doesn't mean the reader will enjoy but poetry can be selfish and why not.
Much like dancing, music and art I see poetry as creative expression and wouldn't music be dull if all song writers were insanely cheerful! |
Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3133 comments posted) 30th March 2008 | Agree with Steve, here. Possibly the two best opening lines in a poem I have read on this site. I love the tone of patronising sarcasm, which, of course, will go right over the heads of the dear things.
Grannies also have fangs by the look of things
cheers
Jane |
Written by Phil (6383 comments posted) 30th March 2008 | I’m bored, frustrated, feeling queer
“Put that down in poetry dear.”
There's another poem dying to get out of this one, Josie. (May have a go later.)
I agree, super opening lines.
Enjoyed.
Phil |
Written by anaisanais (62 comments posted) 30th March 2008 | | I be;ieve poetry is a way of expressing emotion, showing your reader a kind of compassion similar to that found of an artist. A poet can use their words to teach/raise awareness on lesser broached topics. To me it is invaluable, as are constructive critiques and comments. Whether I shall feel the same as I progress on my journey is yet to be seen, but in the meantime of some of my more controversial writes help raise issue and save lives/improve the quality of such... |
Written by Fledermaus (3159 comments posted) 30th March 2008 | Tu quoque Josie?
It's not a bad thing to address this issue, but by doing so in poetry, you do it yourself. I'm not to sure wether this debate is actually going to lead anywhere, as I'm sure a lot of angst poetry will continue to be posted, no matter if it is torched by harsh reviewers, parodied with humour or complained about on forums...
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Written by Josie (2496 comments posted) 31st March 2008 | | Thanks for all your reviews and information therein. I did write this poem a bit tongue in cheek, as you can guess. It's nice to stir up a bit of discussion sometimes. I am glad that the first two lines of the poem caused some emotion - amusement perhaps? Perhaps this is what they mean by "putting passion into poetry" - or not? It is obvious that this poem affected people's emotions in many different ways, but the angry people didn't speak. I was especially thinking of writers, and my readers, when I wrote this. | Hi Josie!
Written by beatricelouise (202 comments posted) 3rd April 2008 | Yes, I'm guilty of your accusation. But I'm not sorry. I feel that it is my right to expose or impose my sadness with friends who I spend so much time. Sorry if it rubs you the wrong way.
I finally got my book by Stephen Fry. I suppose everyone else is done with the exercises.
I don't know what else I would write if I didn't write my feelings and experiences. Maybe, I am just a sour puss. But you did like my Springtime poem. LOL
This is a great site. People, don't give up on me. When I grow up I want to be a writer.
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