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Shallow angst

By punchy

30 March 2008

The torture and the pain I bear

I suffer so and no one cares

How can I climb from this despair

Oh woe

A darkened blanket is the sky

Where is the light, oh how I cry

The tears they burn so I'll just sigh

Oh woe

It's all gone wrong my life is doom

My future is a darkened room

They should have kept me in the womb

Oh woe

Actually it's not so bad

I'll have some wine and then a fag

Followed by a lasting shag

Way hey

And so the ride goes on and fast

How long can all this pleasure last

I reach my peak , oh this is vast

Whoahhh

And now it's still , the fun is through

The happiness has made me blue

I feel so down, oh what to do

Oh woe

Reviews

good un punchy
Written by maipenrai (783 comments posted) 30th March 2008

brought a BIG :grin

to my face.
Bernie

Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 30th March 2008

Fantastic fun. Made me laugh out loud.

:grin

Phil

Written by punchy (500 comments posted) 30th March 2008

Cheers guys.
:grin

Written by stevetroster (1549 comments posted) 30th March 2008

Another great FUN piece.
:grin

Written by Josie (2785 comments posted) 30th March 2008

So glad you put it all into p o e t r y my dear! Now you'll feel better. Glad you found this nice website too.

Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 30th March 2008

Poetry is like pornography - according to Veronica. Getting warm PP. Getting warm! I'd rate this as titillation.

Phil

If it's a shallow dip..
Written by Brett (785 comments posted) 30th March 2008

you will feel angst. Wonderfully funny, as always.Something deeper next time? But keep your poetry frivilous all the same.
Cheers
Brett

Written by Fledermaus (3301 comments posted) 30th March 2008

Same issue addressed as some other did in a flood of poems yesterday, yet I like this approach better, as here it is done with humour AND it gives an example.
I personally think too much parody and meta-poetry can become just as distracting as too much angsty scribbling though.

Written by Veronica_Milvus (637 comments posted) 31st March 2008

Oh why write down
In clear words
When I can be arch, oblique and ob
tuse
I shout from the highest peak
of misery
but I will only hint
and therefore never
communicate.
I cry my angst-ridden soul
to the sky
but no-one listens
that's because
they can't make out
what the F***
I'm shouting about
because after all poetry
doesn't have to say
anything
nothing
at all
as long as the words
don't reach the
right hand
margin
that's
enough.
Isnt it?

Written by punchy (500 comments posted) 31st March 2008

Thankyou all.
As they say Brett " A shallow dip better then no dip at all"

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