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Trials and Tribulations
By Rattle_Spear
29 October 2005
The trial is over,
The tribulation has passed.
Willy has passed matric,
At long last!

Twelve years of bliss,
Who in their right mind would want to miss,
The final test?
Only giving his best!

It took lots of wishing,
And tons of pushing.
To let him reach his goal,
Yes; The winning pole!

Now to join the work force,
It's going to be very tough of course.
Affirmative action is the qualification of the day,
Used to keep us whites away!

We will stand up and be strong,
The crunch is coming......before long!

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trial and tribulations
Written by paulgpaul (37 comments posted) 31st October 2005
I don't think it works as free verse because the rhythms and rhyming are too erratic. I suggest you re-write it in prose and then call it a 'found' poem.
Findings
Written by Rattle_Spear (93 comments posted) 31st October 2005
PP 
Thanks for the expert advice. I think I'll go fishing instead. 
Keep up the good work :?

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