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Speak not, want not
By Steve_K
01 April 2008

 

 

I compare the time spent with you

To standing on an oriental street

Inhaling the spices of the east

With the humid air hanging pensively 


When I walked you to the bus depot

Your Tyrian dyed coat mirrored my pain

Of knowing I could never share my thoughts

I later threw a punch in a bar to vent torment


You will never know of this desire

The longing, the yearning, the craving

As a lotus eater chews his last morsel

I swallow my heart as it beats in my throat

 

 

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Written by mia_ms_kim (1017 comments posted) 31st March 2008
What an intense poem! Are you talking about unrequited love? A man in love with a woman who belongs to another man (say his best friend), perhaps? Or maybe I got it totally wrong. 
 
The reference to the orient is evocative and romantic. Walking the person to the bus depot (to say goodbye I suppose) - sounds heartbreaking. I don't understand the bit about the lotus eater, but swallowing the beating heart is a powerful image of intense love and pain. Beautiful. 
 
Mia :)

Written by Steve_K (55 comments posted) 31st March 2008
Many thanks for the review Mia. As for the theme of the poem, you got it in one! It is about the woman who is now married to one of my best friends, they live in Argentina, that's where she's from. And yes unrequited love is what it was... ;)

Written by punchy (500 comments posted) 1st April 2008
Beautiful and powerful stuff. I really enjoyed this and that last line sums it up exquisitly. That type of hurt is so physical and destructive :cry

Written by Veronica_Milvus (626 comments posted) 1st April 2008
A quality poem. I'd like to be able to pack as much emotion and description into my lines as I've just read here.

Written by Josie (2785 comments posted) 4th April 2008
Emotional hurt is the worst Steve. Well put.

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