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One-shot

By Flippy_D

29 March 2005

This is NOT unfinished! :P

I like my veins.
The wind around me magnificently;
Thick as twisted silk,
Organic like coral.

Fizz Latin Injection Orange.

So much syrup...!
Drips slowly through the passages and pathways.
Hot like tabasco,
Or the glitter of Indian's Ocean,
Or the mist over Japan,
Or the
I don't think I

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intriguing
Written by kevinrobson71 (42 comments posted) 3rd April 2005

i must admit -i'm confused, there is some strong imagery though :eek

Written by Flippy_D (14 comments posted) 7th April 2005

One-shot is a little tricksy. The title is often used (outside of this) to describe sharpshooters, snipers etc. especially with rifles. Here it's describing the motion of the needle. I was trying to capture that moment between the ectasy and the transcendance into the sublime.

The four words are all about the sublime/objective correlative (see T.S.Eliot). They hint, they dangle, they connote certain -mostly physical, here- feelings indirectly, but they're powerful in their own right too. Those four words are the ecstasy. The transcendance follows. His sentences degenerate into simple comparatives, although some are nebulous (the 'heat' of the mist over Japan, particularly - though again, the reader can get an indirect idea of the meaning). He then trails off into nothingness, having moved into the 'sublime'. The reader alone can finish his last sentence.

Not taken drugs myself, though, so I guess I could be way out.

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