This sounds better when spoken, but the meaning is clear either way. I felt strongly about this poem. I hope you like it.
I ask you- What do you think of day after day life? Does it have a point? Should it have a point? We do things day in day out. Go to school or work, eat, laugh, run, sleep, watch TV, rinse repeat. Isn't there a point where you stop to say maybe I should try something else for a change? Work, play run, walk...rinse repeat.
They say that history inevitably repeats itself and that history repeats itself inevitably. Makes you think of dominoes. You take a good bunch of them and stand them up, one behind the other. You make a line, sometimes curving it. Soon you (or your friends, if any) might knock one or some of them down, sending the whole line falling over each other. So, you pick them up and line them up again. The get knocked down, you line them up. Finally, you have the perfect line...Then what? You knock them down, just to watch them topple each other. Rinse repeat...
A bit anticlimactic and pointless don't you think? But like everyday life, you pick them up and do it again. And again. And again until you don't or can't do it again. Oh, what now? You do it AGAIN. Rinse repeat...Although...I never said it was a bad thing...Would you say it is? He would. She would. They would. They would. I'm repeating myself aren't I? Like a broken record that can't be fixed. Where's the toolkit? Why don't you fix it?
No. Don't fix it. You can't make the record stop repeating itself. Because when you do, life will rip in half. You can't fix life. So life continues like a burning flame that keeps going and going and going. Keep going my friend, keep going. It is like a white space. No matter how much you stare you can't find an end to vast white space. No "the white ends here" sign, it just keeps going.
I could go on forever and ever and ever about going on forever and ever and ever. But you're starting to get annoyed at me saying the same things over and over. But to understand fully the meaning of my point, I shall now repeat it again...
I ask you what- What do you think of day after...
And I shall repeat it again and again and again until the word 'again' loses meaning. I'll wait awhile and begin again. "Why don't you stop?" you're probably thinking. Why should I? Am I sounding like I'm repeating myself? Ha. Even the word 'repetition' has repetition within itself. Two e's, two t's, two i's. Just like the sky. Why always blue? Why not red? Purple would be nice too.
How long can I go on before you stop reading this. But I won't be silenced; I won't be the only one. There will be others and others. And this poem will continue and continue until words lose meaning, time loses meaning, white spaces lose meaning...Until LIFE loses meaning...
...Rinse repeat...
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Written by stellafly (7 comments posted) 3rd April 2008 |
| Wow I really like this. I have no idea about poetry or anything really but something in this really resonates with me. I have no useful constructive criticism so I apologise, but this was really fresh and unexpected! |
Written by stellafly (7 comments posted) 3rd April 2008 |
| Wow I really like this. I have no idea about poetry or anything really but something in this really resonates with me. I have no useful constructive criticism so I apologise, but this was really fresh and unexpected! |
Written by stellafly (7 comments posted) 3rd April 2008 |
| Wow I really like this. I have no idea about poetry or anything really but something in this really resonates with me. I have no useful constructive criticism so I apologise, but this was really fresh and unexpected! |
Written by stellafly (7 comments posted) 3rd April 2008 |
| oops sorry didnt mean to do that 3 times! damn computer.. |
Written by Phil (6713 comments posted) 3rd April 2008 |
An age old argument - and one that will probably never have a definitive answer: but I can't see why this should in any way be classed as poetry. Not just because it doesn't look like one either. Still, there's still a piece of writing there. I get the point, but the piece labours it very heavily - which I guess you could argue is the point - but it doesn't make for great reading. In its present state it 'feels' a little affected to me - but there are ideas within that could be developed - either through creative non fiction or a more poetic form. I think for this to be stand out, it has to say something more or differently. Just an opinion - there are clearly others. Phil |
Written by mia_ms_kim (1017 comments posted) 3rd April 2008 |
I don't think this is poetry. If not non-fiction, then perhaps miscellaneous??? I'm beginning to think we need such a section. But I get your point. I had the same question when I was younger. (I think I was bored or depressed or lonely.) But at some point I decided not to ask too many 'why's and just LIVE, and milk each moment for all it's worth. Life is a gift and love is a gift. I saw that when I had my child. And now I enjoy repeating the same thing for my son, I enjoy grocery shopping with/for my family, I enjoy writing, eating, reading... (But I sometimes wish the house would clean itself, the dinner cook itself, and the backyard prune itself.) Mia |
Written by Justice_Ri_Der (5 comments posted) 3rd April 2008 |
| Thank you all for your comments. I actually thought this up a while ago. I don't really think the same way now. There are some bits of life I am discovering. And telling my friends, and helping them deal with it. That's life. I was wondering what section this would go in actually... |
Who cares? Written by msebastian08 (8 comments posted) 4th April 2008 |
I don't know or care whether this is poetry...but I keep reading and re-reading it...rinse repeat...it has a hypnotic quality which keeps you going back! Thanks for posting it...
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Written by mr_soul (126 comments posted) 4th April 2008 |
Liked this very much. Certainly makes you think. I can certainly relate, sometimes it feels as if your just going on and on and on, doing the same old things, blah, blah. Sometimes its hard to see the point in life. In fact, what is the point in life? Nice one! |
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