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Written by Josie (2785 comments posted) 4th April 2008 |
| I doubt it. Happiness doesn't come that way. |
Written by Brett (781 comments posted) 4th April 2008 |
A philosopher as well as an imbiber of ardent liquor; Paula I'm becoming smitten.
This poem has the most accessible of rhythms, that of the ballad, yet its content is far from the traditional folk-tale we associate with the genre.
I'm sure that most of us have asked ourselves the majority of these questions at some point in our lives. I try not to suffer fools, but then again I start to think that my friends have to suffer me.
A succinct piece with a positive attitude; a few more people could do with a kick up their emotional arses.
Cheers |
Written by Brett (781 comments posted) 4th April 2008 |
I don't think Josie has quite read this right.
Just a small point, but I think the punctuation of question marks would work this time.
All the best |
Written by punchy (500 comments posted) 4th April 2008 |
Yes Josie, happiness is something we choose to find.
Thankyou Brett, I bet your friends don't suffer you but revel in your uniqueness and fondness of liquor which is in itself a celebration of life! You certainly make me smile x |
Written by Veronica_Milvus (626 comments posted) 4th April 2008 |
A very positive sentiment, and very well expressed. So many people are focussed on what might have been.
Nice one! |
Written by punchy (500 comments posted) 4th April 2008 |
Thankyou Veronica.
Cheers  |
Written by mia_ms_kim (1017 comments posted) 4th April 2008 |
I like "wisdom" poetry, one that makes me to pause and consider life. This is good for people in early 30's to early 40's, I think, who are old enough to consider those questions honestly and young enough to redeem the rest of their lives (although we can do that at any age). This is a thought-provoking piece because it is simply put, I think. Each line compels me to ask myself "do I do that?"
The 3rd stanza made me think harder. It's important to acknowledge our faults so we can move on. But sometimes our life's regrets (depending on how one interprets it) orginate in someone else's wrongdoing. We do suffer injustice through no fault of our own at times, and some people do suffer under parents who simply should not be parents. This fact can be acknowledged by the sufferer and forgiven, but not excused and brushed aside, if he/she is to look to the future, in my opinion.
A good piece that made me stop and ponder... Thank you, punchy.
Mia  |
Written by Phil (6713 comments posted) 4th April 2008 |
happiness is something we choose to find - especially when despondency comes a-knocking at the door. (In the form of a crazed boss.)
With you there PP.
Phil |
Written by punchy (500 comments posted) 4th April 2008 |
Mia, thankyou. I agree we are not always at fault when it comes to suffering injustice at the hands of our parents but I do believe without brushing aside we can take huge learnings from their mistakes and behavior and better our own lives.Once we take control and responcibility for our own happiness ,it's their to find.
My happiness tonight lies in a bag of quavers, a snickers bar and a bottle of Merlot and I choose to enjoy
Phil, cheers! x |
Merlot
Written by Brett (781 comments posted) 4th April 2008 |
and cheese; applewood preferably. My favourite grape at the moment though is pinot, the South Africans have a blend, Pinotage, that I would convert to Catholicism for if they so much has handed out a sip at communion.
Enjoy your tipple. I'm on the Jameson's at the moment, cheers. |
Written by Phil (6713 comments posted) 4th April 2008 |
Stella for me.
(Not my favourite - but on a BOGOF)
Cheers both. |
It's a lock in..
Written by Brett (781 comments posted) 4th April 2008 |
At Punchy's virtual boozer.
I'll get 'em in.
Cheers |
Written by punchy (500 comments posted) 4th April 2008 |
OOOH, I quite fancy myself as a barmaid.
Alwright me lovely's, it's 'appy hour so knock em back and av a couple on me!  |
Don't
Written by Brett (781 comments posted) 4th April 2008 |
| tempt me, dear. |
Good Poem my dear!
Written by beatricelouise (215 comments posted) 4th April 2008 |
| A thought provoking piece. Enjoyed the challenge to ponder on the what if's. I thought the fact that we should look inside of ourselves and put the blame where it ought to be put was spot on. Have a good one! |
punchy -
Written by fellpony (1608 comments posted) 5th April 2008 |
| you're developing into a metaphysical poet. Oo--er. Look what practice and regular reviews do for you! Your work gets stronger and stronger. Well done. |
Written by Veronica_Milvus (626 comments posted) 5th April 2008 |
I will sit on a high bar stool, wearing a posh frock, and sip cocktails, mysteriously.
Agreed, your verse is blooming. |
Written by punchy (500 comments posted) 5th April 2008 |
Beatricelouise,Fellpony,Veronica- Thank-you so much for your generous reviews, I've just read them and what a welcome start to my day.
I really appreciate it xxx |
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