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Home alone
Written by fellpony
05 April 2008
- three takes on the situation, very much tongue in cheek.



The house is empty, hip hooray!
I’ll ask my mates to come and stay.
We’ll order pizza, lounge at ease
and watch forbidden D-V-Ds.

The house is empty, scary thought!
There’s only me to hold the fort.
I’ll lock the doors and windows tight
so wolves can’t tear my sleep at night.

The house is empty. I’m forlorn.
There’s nothing here to do but yawn.
I’m really pissed off on my own.
I hope my parents soon come home.

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Written by Brett (474 comments posted) 5th April 2008
The first stanza really brings back my teenage years of longing for the house to myself. I wonder what forbidden DVDs you are thinking of though. 
I like these. 
Cheers

Written by Josie (2496 comments posted) 5th April 2008
Yes, once you reach an age to be left alone, all those things go through your mind, but then the idea of being entirely on your own for any length of time really can get you down. I think in last line you meant: "I hope my parents soon come home"?? Quite a fun poem Sue.

Written by Phil (6383 comments posted) 5th April 2008
I used to hate being home alone when I was younger, but I'd just love the opportunity now. Peace... 
 
Fun piece - well put. 
 
Phil

Written by nsperfect71 (44 comments posted) 5th April 2008
Three different states of mind, all brilliantly described. Until the word 'parent' appeared in the last line I'd thought the point of the poem was to show how one event i.e. being home alone triggers different reactions in different people. I especially identified with the second stanza...that could be me when my husband is away on a night shift! 
 
Nancy

Written by owlhoot (17 comments posted) 5th April 2008
I can't help thinking about my 16 y/o son and his tendency to use the DVD player when we aren't home. We have had to hide the cable to keep him away. So true!

Written by fellpony (1507 comments posted) 5th April 2008
My own son (now nearly 30) recorded over a lot of my favourite videotapes, so what I think is X turns out to be a ragged assortment of Y, Z and odds bits of A.  
 
I've been home alone for the last 6 weeks recuperating from knee surgery w/o being allowed to drive, so a piece on the Short Stories section (now removed) triggered this quite easily. 
 
Josie: just testing to see if you could spell ...

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