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A man walked into a shop... |
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By martcoops
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06 April 2008 |
This is a stupidly short stupid story... just testing the waters of my new account! Whoooooo!
M xx Once upon a time a man went into a shop.
"Hello", the man said to the shop keep.
"Hello", the shop keep replied. He was an old man with a moustache and long sideburns.
"I'd like to purchase a magazine please", said the man.
"OK", replied the shop keep.
"No, I've read that one", said the man. Everyone applauded and the man went home.
THE END!
If you enjoyed today's story, please seek medical advice immediately!|
Written by Canadian_Bacon (110 comments posted) 6th April 2008 | Hey, welcome to GW I lol'd at this: "Just read the stories and weep with hatred!" (from your profile) This is quite a way to introduce yourself, but I think I speak for everyone when I say we look forward to seeing some *actual* writing from you! -Mike
| Written by mia_ms_kim (997 comments posted) 6th April 2008 | I loved this - especially the end! 'Everyone applauded,' sounds really funny after that ending. I think you should put it in comedy section. I think it will work (or you might get stoned.) Just a couple of points. 1. don't you mean 'shop keeper'? (maybe not in UK) 2. the comma belongs inside the quote, not outside. eg. "OK," replied ... Liked your profile. "Ignorance is medicine," is another good quote, an old Korean saying. It means it's better for one's health not to know some things. Mia | Boom boom! Written by Leigh (226 comments posted) 8th April 2008 | Well it made me laugh! Brightened up a dull lunch hour. I'd echo Mia's comments about punctuation, etc, though. | Written by TwistedTales (548 comments posted) 8th April 2008 | ....with everyone |
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