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Song of the sirens
By patterjack
08 April 2008
Began  as a midnight  and mortality sort of  poem--  then  doodled  along

Song of the sirens.

Out there in the dark the sirens sing
Not to seduce old  Odysseus but rather
to bear  οἱ πολλοί  from their  beginning  to their oblivion.


Through  the  rush of  traffic  they  thread  their  way  
from home, from  accident, to hospital with urgent wail,
and not  just  at  night, but throughout the day
they sing their messages in their rising scale .  

Flashing the blues and twos to reinforce their strident cry,
the police cars sound their peremptory commands
to drivers to pull to the kerb or else make way .


Motorists submit with curse or patient resignation
to that unquestioned right to control the road
and sit and wait,  mostly in perturbation  
as to what they have breached this time in the highway code.                                  
                                        
The whoopings of the fire trucks as they shout their joy
perhaps do not sound as urgent as the others
apparently concerned with property not people.


They sweep along bedecked in brassy gold and red,
White hoses ranked along each gleaming side,
Racing to where flame demons, voracious, tread
and spread their devouring flames both far and wide.

And I, in my restless sleep, hear a seductive song
which  grows  evermore  compelling, strong,
calling me into that darkness where they themselves belong.

Reviews

Written by Fledermaus (3487 comments posted) 8th April 2008
Nice wordplay. Your mention of Odysseus and the Greek text got me on the wrong track for quite a few lines. Very nice how one can play around with ambiguous words. 
 
Why haven't they called these things banshees instead of sirens?

Written by audrie (454 comments posted) 8th April 2008
I think your musings were more to do with Lorelei, than with alarms, is that right?
I'll go with the banshees
Written by patterjack (1433 comments posted) 8th April 2008
as a proper description , Maus . 
 
Lorelei -- too old for them , audrie .  
 
Thanks both  
 
patterjack

Written by Phil (6959 comments posted) 9th April 2008
Is this what another passing birthday does to you, Brian? 
 
I actually just about managed to read the Greek - I've been learning 
bits ,on and off. I still googled to check - but it's good to know I'm 
getting somewhere - very slowly. Thanks for that opportunity. 
 
The beginning and end (for me) were very effective - I guess some of 
that comes with that thread of connection I (we?) have with the writer. 
These aren't just words - they are the words of someone we 'know.' A 
little more: 'delivering [your] intention.' 
 
As for what went between. I see the connection - and the portrayal of 
busy, partially random events that effect us all - but it's the first 
and last three my eyes are repeatedly drawn to. 
 
Phil

Written by Merioneth (79 comments posted) 16th April 2008
"Motorists submit with curse or patient resignation 
to that unquestioned right to control the road 
and sit and wait, mostly in perturbation  
as to what they have breached this time in the highway code. " 
 
I think some of that "perturbation" comes from the willfully ignored but ever-present knowledge that someday the siren maybe be wailing for them.

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