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Poetry
In Ruin
By lauthiamkok
09 April 2008
A poem?? Of cos not some say. It's just poetic.

A wall
that used to warm your back
and touch my fingers
now has been demolished
before I came and rescued it.
Suddenly, the memory of us
that lived in the wall
has been devastated into
an immobility of solitude,
transfiguring into
an organic being of equanimity,
staying immobility,
abiding perpetually,
at the origin of remoteness
in the ruin and decay;
in wait,
with its patience and generosity
for another coming phenomena of us,
and will once again,
deploy,
immense us, with its
dustiness,
vastness, and
restlessness.

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Written by mia_ms_kim (1019 comments posted) 9th April 2008
This one, I understood some things, some I did not. What I understood I liked - mostly confined to the first half. The wall that has absorbed much of the life lived, being demolished into quietness. After that I sort of got lost. I thought you might be talking about reincarnation of those lives that ruined wall is waiting for.... hmmmm... 
 
Mia :roll

Written by lauthiamkok (60 comments posted) 9th April 2008
yes Mia. the end of the piece is trying to say that memory is reduced into dust and waiting at the original place where it was.  
 
it is a phenomenological theory on memory by Gastan Bachelard if anyone of you ever read about his book. 
 
I dont have the original text where this piece of writing refers from, but basically is like this, 
 
“For the corner denies the palace, dust denies marble, and worn objects deny splendour and luxury. The dreamer in his corner wrote off the world in a detailed daydream that destroyed, one by one, all the objects in the world. Having crossed the countless little thresholds of the disorder of things that are reduced to dust, these souvenir-objects set the past in order, associating condensed motionlessness with far distant voyages into a world that is no more.” In The Poetics of Space, (p.143), Gaston Bachelard. 
 
Thanks Mia. 
 
L

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