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Mother of the Bride
By Veronica_Milvus
09 April 2008
You know what I'm going to say.  I'm in autobiographical mode, and:

This is a True Story.

MOTHER OF THE BRIDE

On my wedding morning, Mum was there
she locked my flat and pocketed the key
fussed with my veil and flowers; followed me
who, in long skirts, stepped carefully down the stair.

Inside the hired car she took my hand
and said “My dear, if this does not work out
you’re always welcome home, don’t ever doubt
your Dad and I would surely understand.”

In disbelief I cut her off mid sentence,
for this was not the proper time or place!
To speak so to a bride, such bitter grace,
deserving of some motherly repentance.

It’s only recently, and now she’s dead
I learned she left my father once, and went
back to her parents, who did not relent,
and turned her out; this was the thing unsaid.

My father’s parents were of softer stuff
took her in, though scandalised, of course
My Mum, however, filing for divorce
said thirteen years of marriage was enough.

Persuaded by my father’s intervention
she finally came home, a bargain made;
her bias against motherhood betrayed
and I was born; the price of her redemption.

Reviews

Written by punchy (535 comments posted) 9th April 2008
Great poem. You said a lot in so few words. 
I love the rhyming patterns, they prob have a name but I wouldn't know but it worked really well. 
Funny though, with my own mother I often feel disappointed that her and my dad stayed together but then I wouldn't exist if they hadn't, mind you it would have spared you guys from all the awful fart poems :grin

Written by Brett (1009 comments posted) 9th April 2008
Again, V, you have produced a gem. A touching, yet not self indulgent piece of writing; that final line almost being the shoulders to rest the previous stanzas upon. 
 
And Paula - life would not be the same without your cocktail of farts and verse. 
 
Cheers

Written by Josie (2854 comments posted) 9th April 2008
A really wonderful poem Veronica. Yes, the final line says it all. There has to be something in between telling you on your wedding day that if it doesn't work out to come home, and the other way. Some help to put things right is well worthwhile. You chose the rhyming pattern I especially like, similar to the Petrarchan sonnets. It's really a gem of a poem as Brett said. Congratulations. It's lovely to read a poem which has a good structure to it.

Written by Veronica_Milvus (769 comments posted) 9th April 2008
Punchy - I think I must have missed the fart poems... 
I am sure the world is a better place with you, and them, in it! I will go and look for them.

Written by mr_soul (126 comments posted) 9th April 2008
Nice one Veronica. Your poems just seem to get better and better really. You really painted a great picture with this one, you told a great story and it flowed beautifully. As you probably know I'm not great with the details of poetry but this was very well structured. It was a very enjoyable read. Nothing to dislike about it. 
Keep up the good work!

Written by mia_ms_kim (1057 comments posted) 9th April 2008
What a story! And told so well without sentimentalism or overt drama in a poem. I am moved from shock to understanding then finally to compassion. So well told in a structured poem. This reminds me that regular people carry inside them touching, poignant family history. It's beautiful. Thank you, Veronica. 
 
Mia :)

Written by Veronica_Milvus (769 comments posted) 12th April 2008
Thank you all. It's very therapeutic turning this stuff into poetry. I'm glad you liked it.

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